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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Day's End (01/01/14)

TITLE: Shadows on the sand dunes
By Margaret Kearley


Shadows on the sand dunes,
Trees, once green, turn black,
The sun, in a half curtsey dips,
There is no going back.
The sky takes off her blue gown,
Slips on her evening gold,
Whilst white soft clouds, now dusky pink,
Survey a day grown old,
The ocean glistens brightly,
Beyond the bay of shale.
Anchors aweigh! Moorings release!
The ship will soon set sail.

Shadows of a memory
From distant years long passed
Recall the dawning of the day
Her moorings were first cast.
Her restless spirit, eager
To leave confines of land,
And surge the billowing mighty wave,
With Captain in command.
O how her hull did glisten,
The paint upon her bow
Gleamed brightly on the bobbing wave,
Yes, I remember how
Through storm or still of morning,
Through many-a noontide swell,
Through afternoons of journeying
She sailed the oceans well.
Discovery and adventure
High tides and stormy sea
She weathered well the briny deeps,
And then came back to me.

But now her day is drawing
With speed unto its end
And she will take her final voyage,
Farewell, well-travelled friend.
I watch her last departure
With misty salty tear
And see her slip, one final time,
And leave the jetty-pier.
More slowly now she tackles
The rising wave and spray,
More laboured is her progress
Than in her former day.

Shadows on the sand dunes,
Turn into darkened black,
The sun has passed now from my sight
There is no going back.
Her sails in the distance
Have receded from my view
Beyond the far horizon,
Beyond the midnight blue.

My grieving is arrested
And I catch, with listening ear,
A whisper from the ocean,
A faint and distant cheer.
I raise my arm in final salute,
Call sadly ‘There she goes’
And from an unseen far-off shore,
Upon the wave that blows,
I hear the cry of welcome,
Across the stormy blast,
Her day on earth has ended,
She’s reached her Home at last!

(This may be a tale of a craft on the sea
Or a parable-picture may unfolded be
With a deeper significance for you and for me.)

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Verna Cole Mitchell 01/09/14
This poem is lovely with imagery and even lovelier with meaning.
Ellen Carr 01/09/14
A lovely poem on both levels - about a ship,or as a parable of a life. Your use of imagery and color is excellent.
Francy Judge 01/10/14
Wow! Just beautiful. I want to read this again and enjoy your imagery and symbolism.
Jan Ackerson 01/10/14
I’d love to have your input into the free writing lessons available on the FaithWriters forums. This week’s lesson is on writing devotionals, and next week will cover writing on topic for the weekly challenge. Look for it at http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67, or if you’re on Facebook, you can “like” Faithwriters Writing Lessons.
Danielle King 01/11/14
There are so many amazing poems this week and this one is no exception. Beautiful imagery and top marks for creativity. Loved it!
CD Swanson 01/11/14
Beautiful and so soothing.

God bless~
Beth LaBuff 01/11/14
Your writing truly rivals that of the masters. You have so many beautiful lines, "The sun, in a half curtsy dips" The "tale of a craft at sea" is very moving, what a gorgeous metaphor and then as to your glorious parable-picture -- simply Wow! I love this!
Virginia Bliss 01/12/14
I like the extensive use of colors in your descriptions,

The meter of the poem is very good.
Judith Gayle Smith01/12/14
Entrancing! You must write a book so we can repeatedly savor this sumptuous banquet . . .
lynn gipson 01/12/14
A beautiful trip you have taken me on with this exceptional poem. Very well done!
Graham Insley 01/12/14
A very powerful poem that had me looking for the hidden message almost from the start.

I love this sort of poetry; thank you for submitting it.

Blessings, Graham.
Dave Walker 01/13/14
Beautiful imagery, a lovely parallel and everything flowing together in such harmony. It is like music. I love it.
Linda Goergen01/15/14
So powerful and lovely and meaningful is this word art poem! Well done! Enjoyed the read!
Bea Edwards 01/15/14
Thank you for the note at the end. It gave me reason to read again and created much more significance.

It's a beautiful piece of work.
CD Swanson 01/16/14

God bless~
Lillian Rhoades 01/16/14
The imagery was breathtaking, and every line masterful!

Congratulations on your first place win.
Danielle King 01/16/14
A huge congratulations on your double award Margaret. This poem is a masterpiece!
Beth LaBuff 01/16/14
Sending many hearty congrats to you, Margaret! This amazing poem is very deserving for 1st place(s). Love it all! :)
Theresa Santy 01/16/14
What a beautiful piece! Congratulations :)
Francy Judge 01/16/14
Congratulations! No surprise here--I loved this the first time I read it. A well-deserved win.
Ellen Carr 01/16/14
Congratulations Margaret! This is a very well-deserved win. As I said before - a lovely poem in so many ways.
Judith Gayle Smith01/16/14
This is so well deserved! The beauty of this poem is indescribable. I have seldom been at a loss for words, but you have stopped me with my heart in my mouth as I reread this wonderful piece.

Thank you for the beauty . . .
KJV Hebrews 10:26-31

Hugs in and through and because of Him,

Verna Cole Mitchell 01/17/14
Congratulations, Margaret, for being #1 in EC for this absolutely lovely poem.
Charla Diehl 01/17/14
Oh, your words painted a slide show of pictures in my mind. Congratulations on taking first place(s) with this deserving, creative and moving poem.