The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 363 times
Member Comments
This is so sad. I could feel the grief through your words. I thought you may be describing a suicide or an accidental drug overdose. And the last line, 'I don't even know if I'll see you in heaven' is haunting. I hope this isn't a personal account.
Wow this is so powerful. I could feel the pain of the MC. You said so much in so few words. This is beautiful yet hauntingly sad.
The pain the MC was experiencing was palpable, and suffocating. This story leaped off the page, and gripped my heart.

It sounds like a suicide...and the last line was gut wrenching.

Excellent job describing the torment, and anguish. I pray that this is not a true story. If so, my heart goes out to you.

God bless~
Congratulations on ranking 25 overall!