The Official Writing Challenge
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02/18/13
This is fun to read - your descriptions and your characters are great and there's quite a message here, 'salted' with humour! I got a bit lost in the story plot, though that might be just me, but the message you portray, and the Bible verse you quote, is strong and clear. Thankyou
02/18/13
I enjoyed this. Good development of your characters. Good lesson. And now I want a grilled cheese sandwich! Keep writing.
02/18/13
I enjoyed your story. Very true to life. What courage Dora has. Well done.
02/18/13
So enjoyable! Love to hear more about Dora! The only pinkish ink to use is for the word complement - did you intend compliment? And may you blush heartily at all the compliments you receive for this delightful entry!
02/18/13
A very entertaining and well developed story. I enjoined all the little tasks that your MC went through. Thank you. Keep writing.
God Bless.
02/19/13
Gee I kinda wanted to know what was on that note...
Lively story with a MC that I would like to meet as I like salty folks!
02/20/13
I liked your story telling, but not your food ingredients. We've just started slimming and I'm informed there's salad for lunch - I hate salad and I abhor onions - so I wouldn't be queueing for one of those sandwiches. I saw the complement mis-spelling but wondered if it was a USA spelling, but then remembered you are a good old Yorkshire lass. Thanks for the enjoyable and amusing read.

Colin Swann (Gold Membership)
02/21/13
I really liked this. It was quite the realistic lesson we must all learn at times. I think you did a splendid job of building the suspense. At first, I thought you used the wromf complement (compliment) but now after thinking about it, I think it was a major hint to the type of culprit we should be looking for. Okay after rereading it, I decided you did mean compliments definitely the first time but it's possible that complements the second time was a hint. (What can I say I've been in the hospital for a week. They say it slows down my brain. :))
Congratulations on ranking 30 overall!
02/21/13
Again I blame the hospital or the numbness in my left side for wromf instead of wrong. Ooh boy time for bed. HUGS<3
02/22/13
Loved so many or your word choices it makes your writing unique and definitely adds depth. The story line was good, too. I especially liked the conundrum: taking both the good and bad with a grain of salt. And, finally what we all should be: salt that all should thirst/hunger for salvation. By the way, yes it was WW II : )