The Official Writing Challenge
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Excellent opening--it really caught my attention and kept me reading. I thought the line about knowing where you will buy pecans next year would have been a good place to stop. Althouh the last paragraphs were interesting, they didn't seem to be fit with the rest of the article.
While it could have easily ended with the line of knowing where you’d buy pecans next year and still been a great story, I personally I enjoyed it all. It was like getting two stories but they intertwined well at the end.

Loved the imagery, I could easily visualize it all as I read, reminded me of summer’s on my grandparents farm and how my grandpa would act. And let me tell you, I could literally hear you in the words I read at the beginning when you were aggravated, because I have a tendency to yell out like that to my husband too when I see something and want to stop—and he gets aggravated at me too! LOL

The story fit the scriptures wonderfully and I thought it was a heart-warming, entertaining story with a great message that I
thoroughly enjoyed reading!
Had me from the first to last paragraph. Wonderful job with this entry.

God bless~
This is so beautiful. You got your point across without sounding preachy. I loved it.
Hearty congratulations on your E.C. win for this excellent story! Your wonderful descriptive writing helped me see the whole event unfold before my mind's eye! I thoroughly enjoyed this and appreciated the lesson included! WAY TO WRITE! :)