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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Clothes (11/02/12)

TITLE: MISS PRIM
By Colin Swann
11/03/12


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Miss Prim said I shouldn't wear trousers;
No frilly collars nor tight blouses.
She said nice girls should wear a dress,
Below the knee and little less.
That Christian girls should dress demurely,
If they desire to live most purely.

Miss Prim said dress colours should be drab;
With little colour or just a dab.
She said no trinkets must adorn,
Just, little lipstick could be worn.
A touch of rouge for cheek colour only,
To stop the fretting that you're poorly

Miss Prim said boys should be good as well;
Not to dress as if adorned for hell.
No built-up heels to make them grow,
And scruffy hair's a no, no, no.
Boys should endeavour to be neat and trim,
Not just fat slobs but sleek, clean and slim.

Miss Prim said we should look to our dress;
And be spruced, tidy and always fresh.
She said the Lord will hope we know,
What to reveal and put on show.
So let's all receive what she's got to say,
To provocative dress let's say nay.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/08/12
I really enjoyed this. It had a face pace that matched the light- heartedness of the verses, yet in the end had a great message. This was a delightful read.
lynn gipson 11/09/12
I love this! It just flowed beautifully and took me back a few decades with the rouge thing. Thank you so much for brightening my morning!

Excellent!

God BLess
David Butler 11/09/12
Yeah, good message, light-hearted though it is. I think Modesty has had a lot of bad press lately, even in Christian circles. This is a good reminder. Clever bit of poetry too, although I'm not into slanting rhyme myself. That's just me.

Unfortunately, I feel that Miss Prim doesn't relate well to the main target audience: our younger generations (?) I know it's a bit of fun, but even I (a 62yo) got a bit annoyed at Miss Prim. She came across rather judgmental and legalistic. If she had gone through a humbling experience and changed somehow, I'd have a lot more respect for her.
But then, I hardly know her. :}
Allison Egley 11/09/12
This is cute.

I actually kept thinking that the "lesson" was going to be for Miss Prim that dress wasn't everything and that it's what's on the inside that counts, and I feel that should have been alluded to in some way, even if were just a mention that our outside appearance should reflect our faith and inner beauty.

I still liked this over all, though, and found myself smiling throughout. Nice job.
Randy Foncree11/11/12
This flowed smoothly...easy to read...God bless and thanks for sharing...
Danielle King 11/12/12
Short, sweet and cute! I can see the wise message here but it reminded me of my early church days. Being new to church, my first impression was that it was all about looking and acting the part. There was so much emphisis on this, that the true message of salvation passed me by. I have bad memories of people's judgemental attitudes. Having said that I enjoyed your fun poem. It was cute and catchy.
Bea Edwards 11/12/12
Witty poem with a timeless albeit straight-laced :-} message. Our outer appearance can detract from our inner beauty and magnificence as children of the king. Moderation and balance is key in my mind. Besides why paint a house with so many colors that you can't see the original work of art who the Lord designed?
However I have also heard a few folks joke that if the barn needs painting-by all means paint it. I don't know I think we are all created beautiful in our Masters eyes.
Myrna Noyes11/12/12
Cute poem! I did believe that the message was going to be about Miss Prim being old-fashioned and judgmental so was a bit surprised by your ending. I do agree with it, though! :)
Noel Mitaxa 11/14/12
Enjoyable but a little tight within its economy of words. I would have liked to see some extra emphasis on healthy attitudes, more than on warnings, but overall well done.
Judith Gayle Smith07/20/13
Most enjoyable! This is a gem . . .