The Official Writing Challenge
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Interesting take on the subject! Well written. Curious as to why you choose to tell it in poetry rather than prose?
11/04/12
I love your alliteration with those "action verbs" "jerked, it jived, it jumped." Your subtle humor, "Remember, I was very young" made me smile (oh can I relate to that). :) I think my favorite phrase is your personification with "'wayward' car." Then your last stanza ties everything together perfectly. Who would have thought that students and a car could have something in common. I love that. You have a gift with rhythm in words and phrases making this perfect for a poetic format.
11/07/12
Now here's a different and creative take on the topic. "Teaching action verbs to those who'd rather act than learn them" is my favorite. Another one is "The car became as active as my students." Great job.
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