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09/09/12
This poem is so true. I like the verse: the processed food I'm craving for all carry fake ID's. Much of the rhythm flows very well--only a couple of verses might be changed slightly to flow better. Nice job.
09/10/12
I agree with the message of your poem! I feel so much "cleaner" inside when I eat nutritious foods like fruits and veggies, nuts and seeds, grains, legumes, etc. Most of your piece had good rhythm, and I enjoyed reading it.
This is a lovely piece. The rhymes and rhythm spot on. I could see myself in your MC and need to once again take control and make some better choices.