The Official Writing Challenge
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03/01/12
Good commentary on what goes on behind the scenes of pageants. Well written...nice job of conveying the MC's feelings to the reader.

God Bless~
03/03/12
I was moved by the sweetness of your MC but it saddens me that so many children are being exploited in this way. I pray that your story serves to enlighten mothers everywhere to allow their children to be children.
03/03/12
You did a great job creating sympathy for your character, telling the story through the child's POV. Just a few words I thought a nine year-old might not say like hasten. . .but you captured a very believable and sad scene. Excellent.
03/06/12
Wow, very emotional and well written. I personally think those pageants are a shame too, because they teach children to dwell on the outward, not inward beauty. Great job on this.