The Official Writing Challenge
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Your premise intrigued me and the posting from Overshadow Me was heartfelt and moving. I felt as if the conflict fizzled a bit, and a few details were left hanging. As much as I'd hate to see the blog post cut, I feel that some of those words could have been better used in furthering the plot and character development. Clever and unique look at the topic.
You had a terrific start it drew me in immediately. This is well-written and flows effortlessly.

My only comment is I've read so many stories with this message. The ending was predictable.

However, with that said, theway tines are today, the possibility of this scenario scares me. We need to do everything we can to prevent this. Keep up the great writing.
A scenario that seems closer and closer to becoming reality in this world today! Great job!
Your story drew me in.

I like the idea behind this story, but got confused with the ending. It seemed to stop mid-story. Are we to assume, having figured out the name and address of the blogger, that she was caught and reprimanded in some way, maybe even killed? I kind of feel like I was left hanging.

I liked the story idea and the writing. This simple sentence stands out to me: "Kevin offered his boss a rare grin." I like your choice of words. You could have plainly said "Kevin grinned", but you made it interesting, while revealing a small detail about Kevin ... that he rarely smiles.

Nice job. :)
Wow - good job with this! It kept me riveted wanting to see how it would turn out. Nicely done! God Bless~
Very intriguing scenario, but I was left looking for more of a build-up towards the end, as you were well within the word-limit.
I LOVE this! Your whole setting (future for us--but possibly the present for some in this world) and your gripping story was chilling and uplifting at the same time. Great work!
Congratulations for ranking 7th in your level and 13th overall!