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06/10/11
It took a while to understand what was happening and that made the first part seem a little clumsy to me. But, overall I think the point is well demonstrated and it ends nicely.
06/14/11
Wow! Creative start, I think I'm reading about a physical death, then as I'm reading it becomes clear. I like your story tie-in to the verse cited at the ending. You have a great story with a message!
06/15/11
Very creative take on the topic! I too thought at first it was physical death. Lived the feminine version-Luci-rather than Lucifer.

Need a little help with punctuation, but a great message.