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03/18/11
Wow, how dramatic. Really touched me.

At the beginning I was confused as to where everyone was and why. Her 'family' on the beach, yet she was with her dad...she wanted to be alone, but go with him. Took me a bit to sort it out, but nothing major.

Thank you for writing this tribute. Awesome.

03/18/11
Very good. Strong writing, inspiring. Great job creating emotion in this piece.
This left my heart pounding. I can't imagine the fear and the unknown that so many are experiencing right now. Very well-done Tiny red ink in the beginning you used where instead of were. But the story was so suspenseful and wonderful. I I almost didn't note it. Well. done.
03/19/11
So moving and very creative to make it a monologue rather than a short story. Excellent.
03/20/11
Thank you for paying homage to all the brave men and women in Japan. I'm sure in the midst of all the horror, we will hear a few of the miraculous survivor's stories as well.
03/20/11
Various entries have covered the tragedy that hit Japan--every one a deserving read--but this one is more haunting as it is told from a survivor's POV. Very good.
Congratulations for placing 11th in your level and 19th overall!