The Official Writing Challenge
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I really like the metaphors you developed through this poem. Beautiful poem!
If you don't mind some constructive criticism, I have a thought: I felt like this poem was a little "over-rhymed". Because of the number of rhymes you use in your structure, some of the rhymes just end up sounding a little forced.
In spite of that, though, I really like this poem. Keep up the good work!
03/03/11
Beautiful word picture of our times! Loved it!
03/04/11
I enjoyed the easy rhythm and flow of this lovely poem and its message.
You have a wonderful message presented beautifully in your poem.
03/06/11
I liked the descriptive phrases of your poem, especially your comparison of time to raindrops.
03/09/11
I loved this imagery! We need to learn to enjoy each "drop" of life.
03/10/11
I loved this poem! Good comparison and the last two stanzas bring this well written and well rhymed poem to a wise conclusion.
03/10/11
Congratulations on your EC!
03/10/11
Wonderful poem. Loved it!