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02/17/11
I can't even begin to imagine the heartbreak!
02/18/11
Oh, the heartbreak. Wow! You did an excellent job of conveying what she was feeling and sensing all the way through. I liked the hope in the last two stanzas.
Lump in my throat too. I liked the short phrases & that each 4th line tells us something about the speakerís heart. Then the one line about the little oneís heart, sort of symbolic of her short life.
So sad, but honestly penned. I liked the way you used the heart at the end of each stanza. It's amazing how trong the heart is. Loved the message. Great job. You had a plan and executed it and created the emotion you wanted in your reader. A success.
02/19/11
Ahhhh... *tears for all those who have suffered the death of a child*
02/19/11
I love the short, but powerful, lines. I found myself racing through your poem, my heart alternately rejoicing and weeping. The ending leaves me with a sense of peace. A very effective work.
02/20/11
Very well done. So sad and poignant. The short phrases flow so well and the whole piece makes my mommy heart just break too! Fantastic.
This would be so hard to go through! I really liked the ways you expressed the different feelings of the heart in each stanza!
02/20/11
Much power packed into a short space. Very well done.
02/21/11
Heartbreaking but wonderfully written. Sadness so beautifully expressed.
02/21/11
So stark and heart-rending. Excellent! Well done on this awful topic.
02/22/11
You brought me to tears with this one, as friends of ours went through this less than a year ago. A beautiful ending, and a really powerful piece of writing.