The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/11
What a sad accounting of our world.
02/14/11
What an important lesson.
This was well written and thought provoking.
02/14/11
A very important message, and related very well. There were a couple of grammar problems which a tiny bit of editing would overcome...and would be needful because this is well worth reading!
The past doesn't repeat itself only if we're smart enough to make sure we correct our mistakes and educate the next generation. This is beautiful and done so well.
02/15/11
A good poem, I appreciated the passion that you communicated. I think the use of the word "destined" was possibly the wrong word unless they did become the doctor or the leader - but doesn't seem like that.
02/15/11
What a powerful message. I liked the format and flow of the poem as well.
02/16/11
Your visuals of wasted potential are poignant. Well done.
02/16/11
Has the sound of the African American preaching tradition - like a hammer ringing on an anvil, refrain after refrain.