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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Era (02/03/11)

TITLE: nearly, nearly faded gone
By Jim McWhinnie
02/03/11


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I am a child of Christendom,
a son of ivy-covered traditions
that have climbed the grey stoned walls of timeless cathedrals,
ageless cathedrals,
caverns filled with the echoes of noble immortality
thunderous words of marble doctrines floating like mist
among the ghostly whispered prayers
of saints and sinners long gone to dusty tombs
in eternal wait for the coming hallelujahs.

I am a child of Christendom,
the last of a long grey line of hallowed souls
that felt the call of the belfry carillon,
a beckoning to tend the ancient flame against the winds of mortal change,
to hold fast the legacy bestowed
and to never let it go until
until lifted from our falling hands when our course has spent its steam.

I am a child of Christendom,
birthed to Mother Church in the shaded warmth of stained glass filtered light,
and in the fragrance of candle smoke
that has gathered in the lofty timbers
before rising into the heavenly places that reside beyond the highest spire,
leaving us behind in these earthly places
to march on to the cadence of the muffled drums,
toward the music of the Black Watch piper
who awaits us all
further down the pilgrimís road.

I am a child of Christendom
now grown old and bent and grey,
and I fear the world that I have always known
is nearly, nearly faded, nearly faded gone away.


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Henry Clemmons02/10/11
I liked this presentation of words in poetic fashion. I also appreciated you didn't try to explain. An enjoyable read; a piece of art I enjoyed. Thank you. I am actually going to copy this for futhr study. I like your work here.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/14/11
lovely poem--I especially liked the line "in eternal wait for the coming hallelujahs."
Kate Oliver Webb02/15/11
I enjoyed this SO much. The form was perfect for the content, which was rich and evocative. I agree; this is a keeper, to be read again and again. Its message is powerful.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/17/11
Congratulations on writing such an inspirational winner.
Barbara Lynn Culler02/17/11
Very vivid imagery. I felt like I could see and feel the old cathedrals.

Congratulations on your placement!
Benjamin Graber02/17/11
Excellent poem! I really like your solemn tone, which makes the poem feel like a Gregorian chant. Congratulations on your win!
Glynis Becker 02/17/11
Congratulations! A well-deserved win! This is beautiful and haunting.
Margaret Kearley 02/17/11
Congratulations Jim on your well deserved win. Such wonderful descriptive writing and a great rhythm to this.
Beth LaBuff 02/17/11
Beautiful work. Super congrats on your Editor's Choice award!
Michael Throne02/17/11
Well done! I loved it.
Bonnie Bowden02/17/11
Wow! Powerful poem. I like the repetition and the memory the poem evokes. I think I'm going to bookmark it for my files.

Congratulations on your 1st place award.
Rachel Phelps02/17/11
Moving and powerful. Excellent! Well deserved first place!
Eliza Evans 02/17/11
Very, very nice. Beautifully done.
Huge congratulations, Jim!!!!
Lollie Hofer 02/17/11
Beautifully written. Congrats on your win. :)
Henry Clemmons02/17/11
Congrats on EC. I liked it from the git go. Very impressive.
Catrina Bradley 02/17/11
I love the gentle rhythm and the internal rhymes - they carried me along and wouldn't let me stop reading. Stunningly beautiful.
Deborah Porter 02/17/11
Jim, I wanted to pop in here and also congratulate you on your win. The judges thought it was an exquisite piece of writing, and as one said, the last stanza gave her shivers. Exactly the sort of response you want to evoke through your words. Well done on this very though provoking poem (and our prayers are with you).

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Loren T. Lowery02/18/11
Jim, there is something quaint and nostalgic about your poetry. It is calming yet profound, reflecting I'm sure the soul of the one who penned the lines. Congratulations on your win of this lovely poem.
Troy Manning02/20/11
Very nice job of evoking the historicity/antiquity of our faith through your language usage. Congratulations!