The Official Writing Challenge
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01/13/11
As a mother of a sp. needs son, I really appreciated this story. When somebody goes out of their way to be kind to my boy, it makes my day - just as you portrayed in your story.

Great writing!
Oooh! I've just been thinking about becoming a mystery shopper. Thanks for giving me a peek at how it works. Glad to know there's a place for special comments too!
01/14/11
I was personally blessed by the kindness of the MC. I wish more people were aware of the need for kindness. This fit the topic beautifully and meaningfully, in my humble opinion. Well done.
01/15/11
You had me going from beginning to end. There's a lot to learn from your story, but grace and compassion really stand out. What a great lesson for all of us.
I had a feeling that there was something "different" about the mother/son, but not sure what. Great story and so true.

I work with special needs kids and adults and know how they can be so misjudged.

Thanks for the eye opening account.
01/15/11
I've done some mystery shopping at restaurants, so I could definitely relate to this. Good job building suspense until the question is finally answered: why is Rose not paying more attention to the next table? I, too, would definitely add some comments at the end of my evaluation! Well done!
I love this story. Your details are wonderful. I was drawn right in and imagined all Kinds of reasons thewaitress might be ignoring the other boy. Your details painted a perfect picture of almost every Denny's I have been in. This is a great story and a wonderful message.
What a tenderly-written story! I was completely taken in once I started reading! Very good job!!
Your story really made me think about how the world treats people with special needs and, more specifically, how I should. Thank you for putting this challenge in an interesting story.
01/17/11
This is very well done, thought-provoking and wonderfully descriptive. Just an all-around, top notch piece of writing.
01/20/11
This was so engaging. You really were so creative with the story, giving it more depth than I thought possible with a word count restraint. I really enjoyed this. Thank you for leaving a comment on my entry. I appreciate the time you took.