The Official Writing Challenge
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Very creative idea and a beautiful story
I so enjoyed this version of the shepherds coming to see the Messiah and see the star and feel the wonder.
Excellent creativity! Some of the phrasing felt a little clunky - try reading it out loud and finding a voice for your MC, make us feel what she feels. Loved this idea with Christmas coming up.
You have filled in gaps in the narrative with a strong dose of reality through your descriptions of the visible events and the invisible thoughts of this shepherd girl. A great thought-provoker as Christmas approaches.