The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 510 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
12/02/10
This story really kept my attention. At first it sounded as if some major incident - like a car crash -had caused the problems. Then I read what really happened and I hope that there can be a happy ending to this tragic tale.
Every ounce of me wants to scream she would care. Her heart is breaking from loneliness and she doesn't know what she did wrong. I wish my husband had written this so that I had a clue that he still cared. This is a beautiful story and I have a single tear falling down my cheek.
12/06/10
The grim reality in this piece is gripping. I think I would have liked a little more conflict in action - him attempting a small reach out and it not being noticed or being misinterpreted. The message is a needed one. Well done.
12/07/10
What a stirring, poignant, all too true account of how we let the things most precious to us slip away. Very thought provoking!