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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)

TITLE: Umm...Boss?
By Ruth Neilson
10/15/10


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Alexis sighed as she eased herself onto the pine-needle covered dirt. She could hear the crickets and frogs compete for air time, their voices layering and combining into a complex song. She loved this time of the day. But today? She hated it. The weight of her boss's daughter predicament weighed heavily on her mind.

Ten years ago, she had promised him that she would keep little Katie safe from ever having to make the decision he had to when he left. A note, barely just a scrap of paper really, revealed that Katie was no longer a little girl. Who would have thought that quiet and meek Katie would have been bold enough to not only overcome her fears, but effectively thumb her nose at the world?

But, that still left Alexis with a very difficult problem.

How was she going to tell her boss that his little girl was arrested and possibly sentenced to a labor camp? Alexis popped her knuckles as she contemplated the conversation she was about to have. She mentally began to rehearse what she was going to say.

"Look, Boss, I know you told me to keep Katie safe, but she's sixteen now; she made her own decision."

She could almost hear his deep voice rumbling back. "I told you to keep her safe!"

"But Boss, it's not my fault. There's only so much I can do short of locking her away in a small closet."

"And why didn't you do that?"

"'Cause someone had to keep you up to date on your daughter. And I can't be everywhere all the time. I'm not God, you know."

She could hear the Boss grunt and imagined him turning back to the campfire. She could see him pacing around the campsite before turning to face her again. "Fine, what was Katie's punishment? If she's old enough to get into trouble, she's old enough to come here."

This was where the conversation was going to become tricky. Alexis only had rumors as to where Katie was sent. One rumor said that she was sent to prison, which was virtually impossible to rescue anyone from...and the other was a Work Farm, which would be just as hard to track Katie down in. Alexis knew that there were several scattered throughout the country.

Alexis took a deep breath and continued to rehearse the conversation. "Boss, no one really knows. I have a couple of rumors but nothing to say for sure."

"Where is she?"

"She's either in jail or at a Work Farm. Either way, it's going to be virtually impossible to track her down. It's going to take time and man power."

Alexis popped her knuckles again before picking up a pebble and tossing it into the creek. It was going to be impossible to make that man happy. But she was going to try. First thing is first, she was going to try her best to track Katie down. That way she could have something to tell her boss as soon as possible.


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Sarah Heywood10/21/10
This is a good beginning to what could be a very interesting and intriguing story. I found myself wanting more clues to what was going on. Where was the MC? Why was she in the woods in the first place? What was the time period? I think if you'd had more words to work with, I would have found those things answered in short order.

Good writing!
Lillian Rhoades 10/22/10
Great beginning. The ending was somewhat weak. I like the created way you handled the "face to face" aspect of the topic.
Lillian Rhoades 10/22/10
Oops! I mean the "creative" way....
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/24/10
Ooh I want to know so much more!! You drew me into your story and I can't wait to read more of it.
Dee Yoder 10/24/10
Good introduction to your NaNo project. It left me wanting to know more!
Laury Hubrich 10/24/10
So many questions:) Guess you have a great setup for Nano now. Good job!
Mona Purvis10/25/10
I read this several times to see if I could get who, what, where. But, I must admit I don't quite know what is happening. A tease for sure.

mona
Verna Cole Mitchell 10/26/10
Your descriptive introduction drew me in. I'd like to know more...