The Official Writing Challenge
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I have tingles down by back. What a well told tragic story. I was holding my breath the whole time. Great descriptions.
08/02/10
I was confused at first from Matthew to the next paragraph, the friends at the campsite but I adapted easily. So sad. ugh. :(
Sad but sweet story. I agree with Laury that it would help if there were an extra space between paragraphs when the location changes, and there were a couple of puncutation errors, but otherwise this was very well-written. You drew us in with just the right amount of details.