The Official Writing Challenge
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Very good story and was glad to hear the baby cry at the end.
Impressive use of descriptions and the sentence structuring makes this a striking, dramatic entry.

I was hanging on for dear life, from grasping for the out of reach call button to the screeching halt of the car ride. I felt it all.

This is one of your best yet.
Loved this story. Could see this woman & almost hear her saxophone. My favorite phrase: "her death was only the bridge between choruses".
Ooops. Meant that comment for another story. Sorry.
What a thriller! The ending is perfect.
This entry held my attention from start to finish--so glad for the baby's cry at the end.
Just beautiful. You're a talented writer.
You had us sitting on the edge of our seats. It was story telling at it's best. Excellent.Blessings, Ruth
Wow. Wonderfully suspenseful story. Love the descriptions of the flash back scene.