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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: The Book Store/Library (06/03/10)

TITLE: Take Me There
By Rachel Burkum
06/07/10


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Take me to the land beyond,
The morning hillside dew.
Take me on a journey far,
Away from pain and gloom.
I want to see the mountaintops,
I want to kiss the sky.
I want to touch upon the clouds,
And fly 'til dusk is nigh.
Take me there, oh take me there.


...I seek the time-worn shelves.


Take me to the golden gates,
Of castles, ships and seas.
Take me down the road that winds,
Around the starry reefs.
I want to see the knights of old,
I want to dance with kings.
I want to soar with butterflies,
Or with the fairies sing.
Take me there, oh take me there.


...I turn a weathered page.


Take me to the cliffs of time,
Beyond my feeble sight.
Take me where no man has tread,
Where pirates find their plight.
I want to see the rushing waves,
I want to touch the moon.
I want to ride a white winged horse,
And sail upon the dunes.
Take me there, oh take me there.


...I weep in beauty's prose.


Take me to the gardens great,
Where sights and smells collide.
Take me on adventures grand,
To race the ocean's tide.
I want to feel the morning's breath,
I want to drink the rain.
I want to dig for ancient gold,
From writer's pen it came.
Take me there, oh take me there.


...I blow on dusty words.


Take me to a blissful realm,
Where I might reign as queen.
Take me to the lion's roar,
A jungle full of dreams.
I want to breathe the twilight air,
I want to see the fields.
I want to walk beneath the mist,
And fight with warrior's shield.
Take me there, oh take me there.


...I must set the book aside.


Take me where no map is drawn,
So I may be the first.
Take me far away from here,
Where hearts and dreams give birth.
I want to come again one day,
I want to turn the page.
I want to sit in quiet's arms,
Imagination's stage.
Take me there, oh take me there.


...I leave brick walls behind.

Take me there, oh take me there.

...Tomorrow I return.


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Maria Egilsson 06/11/10
This is extraordinarily beautiful. Reflects the longings of my heart when I read... leaving walls behind and soaring. Excellent.
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/15/10
Extraordinarily well written, beautiful.
Linda Wright06/15/10
Ah, this is beautiful! Thank GOD for books and gifted writers who "take us there."
You have expressed beautifully the power of written words.
mick dawson06/15/10
What can I say to do this justice? Stories are never just bits of paper bound together. A great deal of a writer's soul is expressed within the pages, along with countless experiences only dreamed of. On behalf of all of us, I thankyou for expressing that very concept in your poem.
Lyn Churchyard06/16/10
WOW! Absolutely amazing-outstanding!
Micheline Murray06/16/10
I must plead guilty to often bypassing an entry after reading the first line of a poem. But you drew me in immediately and literally held me captive until the end...and I didn't want it to end...just like the books that "take us there."
Benjamin Graber06/16/10
Oh wow... I really like this poem! Perfect voice, beautiful, vivid imagery - it's perfect!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/16/10
This is beautiful. It echoes my sentiments in such a wonderful, soothing way.
Beth LaBuff 06/16/10
Exquisite work... I LOVED where this took me!
Rachel Phelps06/16/10
*deep sigh* That. Was. Incredible. I love it so much. Absolutely perfect.
Edmond Ng 06/16/10
Nicely written poem! You've brought out the childlike feeling of a longing heart very well, of a keen spirit waiting to enter into a different realm within the stories written in books.
Susan Montaperto06/16/10
I want to go to! I loved all the images you and your very active imagination produced through just reading or thinking of books. Thank you.
Ann Grover06/17/10
Congratulations! This is beautiful... I love the lilting rhythm. . . and the sweet and gentle atmosphere.
Margaret Kearley 06/17/10
Absolutely beautiful Rachel. Congratulations on your very well deserved win.
Nanci Rubin06/17/10
Terrific and yes, isn't it glorious that we can visit exotic places, resolve conflicts, be heroes and never leave the comfort of our favored armchair. Excellent writing, cadence like a wonderful foxtrot...much enjoyed...
Patricia Turner06/17/10
Oh, so beautiful, so lyrical. Magnificently done and oh so deserving of its place on high today! Congratulations!
Lyn Churchyard06/17/10
A well deserved 1st place EC. Congratulations, this was truly outstanding.
Marita Thelander 06/17/10
Oh how beautiful! I could picture each stanza in a watercolor painting. Childlike visions, but with mature thoughts.

I LOVED this line: Take me where no map is drawn,
So I may be the first.
Take me far away from here,
Where hearts and dreams give birth.
Could I use that quote someday? It creats such adventure and fear at the same time at the thought of pursuing one's dreams.
Mona Purvis06/17/10
Remarkable in every way. Deserving of #1 here and so much more. Is there anything a book does more than take us away?

Mona
Catrina Bradley 06/17/10
Amazing! Congratulations!! I love it. :)
Carol Slider 06/17/10
Wow! What a beautiful evocation of the power of a good book! I love every word of this. Very well done--Congratulations!
Connie Dixon06/17/10
Love the meter and the flow of this wonderful piece. Huge congrats on your first place win and EC. Very nice!
Nancy Sullivan 06/18/10
Beautifully written and with such a tender spirit. Congratulations on a well-deserved recognition. Nancy Sullivan
Henrietta W. Romman06/27/10
Oh dear Rachel...Congratulations to you---From the loving heart of Our Lord...Thank You! Thank You! After my absence of 3 months of forced bed rest---the Lord lets You bless me with this lovely lovely piece! Rejoice! You have touched my heart SO MUCH, that I prayed for greater Poetry Blessings for you---in the months to come..Amen...Amen
Henrietta W. Romman06/27/10
Oh dear Rachel...Congratulations to you---From the loving heart of Our Lord...Thank You! Thank You! After my absence of 3 months of forced bed rest---the Lord lets You bless me with this lovely lovely piece! Rejoice! You have touched my heart SO MUCH, that I prayed for greater Poetry Blessings for you---in the months to come..Amen...Amen