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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: The Critique/Review (for writers) (05/06/10)

TITLE: Lamb led to the Slaughter
By Ruth Neilson
05/11/10


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A story perfectly told,
Without a flaw,
Without a gap.
The artist could only hope--
That her readers
Would see her soul.

Not a word wasted,
Precisely chosen words,
Chosen for a specific image...
Or maybe a sound.
But the fear remains
What if--

What if. The words
Bounce painfully around the artist's mind.
What if they hate it?
What if they miss the point,
The subtle humor,
Or even the witty repartee?

The artist is haunted,
Day and night as she labors,
Giving birth to her ultimate masterpiece
Blood, sweat, and tears;
Only to offer it up as a sacrifice
A lamb upon the alter.

A lamb led to the slaughter...
How poetic! But, the artist presses on
Polishing, tightening, preparing
Her work for the masses.
One harsh word can shatter it
Or one kind word boost it.

The artist knows,
It is a matter of time--
Soon the work will be fed to the wolves.
Will it be accepted or rejected?
Will her peers reward her hard work?
Or will it be another cruel moment?

The fate of the artist's sanity hangs in the balance.
But for now, the artist rests.
Closing her eyes and seeking her rest
Dreaming of another masterpiece
One that truly will be truly perfect
But, for now, the artist rests.


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Mona Purvis05/13/10
I like this take on the topic. Will we ever get to the place where we worry less about what our critics think?
Typo, alter/altar.
Maybe, use truly only once in next to last line.
I could feel the writers anxiety.
Mona
Barbara Lynn Culler05/16/10
I agree with Mona about feeling the writer's anxierty!
You expressed it very well.
Angela M. Baker-Bridge05/18/10
You perfectly describe the thoughts we have when staring at the Submit button each week! Love the way you presented this familiar inner turmoil.
Lyn Churchyard05/19/10
Oh yeah, I can relate to this. It strikes so close to home with a writer's emotions. Well done!
Beth LaBuff 05/19/10
Your use of the "Lamb led to the slaughter" metaphor is beautiful here. I love this, "masterpiece....Only to offer it up as a sacrifice
A lamb upon the alter." Everyon on FW can relate to your feelings here. Very nice!
Elizabeth Cain05/19/10
All writers, I'm sure, can relate to the fear of their work meeting approval or rejection (I struggle immensely with it!). I really like how you had added at the end 'for now the writer rests', reminding us that after we've written something we do need to take a deep breath and just relax. Loved the flow of the poem, and I especially loved the creativity of the sacrifice being offered to the wolves, and the question of how it would be received. Great job!
Sara Harricharan 05/19/10
Ah. yes...the "What if?" You capture the feelings of anxiety and worry very nicely here! ^_^
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/19/10
And still we try...for perfections--good article.
Rachel Phelps05/19/10
Beautifully written. Excellent.