The Official Writing Challenge
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03/18/10
i enjoyed this read from start to finish. Like how you weave the two point of views together. A very satisfying conclusion!
I loved it. This could convince anyone to pack a shoebox.
03/21/10
Tearing up. I love the back and forth POV's woven together - Each scene and MC is masterfully written. Fabulous entry.
03/21/10
Beautiful work on this! I especially like the creative format you used! It's wonderful to hear what this organization is doing. Demitri brought tears to my eyes too.
03/22/10
Really like how your story showed two different POV's. Thought it was creative.

Well told story, and wonderful inspiration to us all; we could all do more, and the cost to us is minimal, but so huge to those less fortunate.
03/22/10
Wow! I love the way you mixed in the two boy's lives. Wow! It gave me goose bumps. I love the ending! Wow!
03/22/10
The contrasting viewpoints here are wonderful, reminding us of everything we have to be thankful for... and what all of us should be doing to help others not so fortunate. A beautiful story!
03/23/10
Loved the contrasting worlds in this story. Masterfully done!
03/24/10
Your story touched my heart. Wonderful job on the writing.
03/25/10
Congrats on your EC and Masters placing! Well done!
03/25/10
It's easy to see why this has a winning ribbon. I enjoyed the contrasting paragraphs which underscored the boys and their circumstances in life.
These purses do mean so much to the recipients--our church has been doing this for years.
Great job--congratulations.
03/25/10
Super congrats, Kellie, on your level placing and Editor's Choice!
03/28/10
We have so much - we are so fortunate, rich even - and we don't even know it. Thanks for showing this story from two opposite perspectives. Shoeboxes are a big deal. Congratulations!
04/11/10
Thank you for sharing!--Liked the parallel structuring.