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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Phew! (02/11/10)
I need to calm down. I've been planning this for months. It's going to be okay.

No it's not. Who am I kidding? Tonight has to be perfect. If it's not...

How am I going to concentrate on my work today? I should have taken the day off. No, maybe not. If I were sitting at home, I'd just be pacing and wearing down the carpet. Better to keep my mind occupied. Okay. Here comes a customer. Concentrate. It's not that hard. Really.

"Hello. Welcome to The Muny. I... I mean Burger Barn."

Smooth move there, saying the wrong name... Brilliant. Perhaps I should have stayed home after all. That Mythbusters marathon on TV would have kept my mind occupied. Focus. This will all be over soon. Then life will continue as normal. After tonight...

Who am I kidding? Life won't be normal after tonight. Well, I mean, for awhile, maybe. But not really. Am I really ready for this?

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Okay. I made it to The Muny. Good. Step one complete. Hey, why is everyone standing up? And what's that music? The show hasn't started yet. I'm getting weird looks. Oh wait. It's the National Anthem. Whoops. Stand up. Hand over heart. Song over. Sit down. Ignore weird glances. Show beings.

Intermission. It's nearly show time. Well, I mean, the show's half over. But... never mind. Oh no. I forgot... pat my pockets... No, it's there. Good.

The second half of Beauty and the Beast is about to start that means... Oh, I'm nervous. Calm. Calm. Think cleansing thoughts. Think happy thoughts.

Hey, why is there a spotlight on me? Is it... Oh. Oh my. It's show time.

"I've loved you my whole life. I just didn't know it until I met you. I know I'm a beast, but will you be my Beauty? What I mean is... Abigail Noel Jenson, will you marry me?"

Breath.

Breath.

Why is it taking her so long?

"Yes, Jacob Elliot Hartman. I will marry you."
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/23/10
You had me going the whole time. I thought he was going to rob a bank, not propose. Good job.
Bryan Ridenour
02/23/10
Creative take on the topic, and you kept me guessing until the end. Good job!
Beth LaBuff 
02/24/10
Good use of foreshadowing in your story. What a great a-ha moment at the end! I enjoyed this!
Rachel Phelps
02/24/10
Awww! That's such a great "Phew!" Loved the way you used the internal dialogue.
Lollie Hofer 
02/24/10
I was waiting for the mc to get up blow his lines on stage but liked the surprise turn. You did a good job capturing his inner turmoil.