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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Yellow (11/12/09)

TITLE: See Me? Here I Am!
By Ruth Neilson
11/17/09


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They dance and sway,
In the dimming summer's eve
Announcing to the world,
"See me? Here I am!"

Marigold follows them;
I squint my eyes, almost seeing her golden curls bouncing.
She dances and sways,
Hands wide open to capture the lights.

Marigold giggles, spinning happily,
Small hands capturing the tiny creature.
She peeks in, and giggles again.
Her face lights up, in the yellow glow.

"See me? Here I am!"
It flashes again, and crawls up her hand.
She squeals with laughter,
Unclasping her fingers, letting it go.

Marigold grins at her mother,
Spinning again, restarting the dance of the fireflies.
I laugh, watching her yellow bandana flutter in the air.
A corner peeks open, revealing her scalp.

In that split second,
The flash of her bare scalp,
The firefly dance lost its illusion of normalcy.
Instead, I see autumn of a young life.

Dainty hands reach out again,
Capturing, clasping, like a prayer,
"See me? Here I am!" The golden light flashes.
She looks at me as if to say:

See me, Daddy? Here I am!
Watch me twist and turn,
Dip and sway, just like a firefly.
Donít hold me too closeó'cause I'm gonna fly away too!



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Ruth Brown 11/19/09
I really liked this poem. Each line wanted you to move right into it! A poet you are!
Lenda Blackmon11/24/09
Oh, this brought a tear to my eye. Great writing.
Mona Purvis11/25/09
Strong emotional pull from this well-written piece. So very well done. Not a wasted word.
Mona
Barbara Lynn Culler11/25/09
I did not get it until the second read. So sad, yet so beautiful! Well written.
Marita Vandertogt11/26/09
What a beautiful picture you paint of the innocent play of a young child - and the emotional ending. Great writing!