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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Black (10/15/09)

TITLE: But For a Moment
By
10/22/09


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A black cloud rises from the autumnal grass

as one

it lifts, corkscrews, falls right

shuffles like cards onto peeling branches of birch

lifts again

one starling—a single digit connected to the body

beauty, yes, she thinks, even as she walks away

resolved toward independence

tuck and dip, rise and fall—

far, skeptical heart travels

shadow follows underfoot

A symphony of opposites in the beating of the air

expand, contract

amplify, concentrate

freedom, security.

The starlings, she once read

kept their formation—not by fretting on the whole

but by navigating with the seven birds surrounding it

the goal to maintain equal distance

whatever the distance was

food sought—a broad swooping curve, short rise, rest, search

falcon spotted—tight barrel roll to the left

the individual, mark-worthy

the body, mesmerizing, purposeful

like carbon bits of waltzing coal.

On the crest of a hill, she hesitates

a solitary starling breaks away—but for a moment

opportunistic predator has its way

a mourning cry—reluctant spectators

a squawking—her pride

she turns, retraces mental resolutions, physical steps

passing beneath black umbrella

undeniably beautiful, each one

yet the group—the flock—Divine magnificence

a gift.


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Charla Diehl 10/22/09
Great imagery throughout this poetic piece.
Verna Cole Mitchell 10/22/09
I love all the images in this gorgeous poem, but "carbon bits of waltzing coal"-- now that's genius!
Loren T. Lowery10/22/09
Beautiful in imagery and lyrical cadence. A life lesson to ponder as well. Magnificent!
Mary Knoll Santos10/22/09
Great words, nicely put.

Indeed, the magnificence of GOD is awesome and full of mercies!

Thanks for sharing.
Diana Dart 10/28/09
This all felt very wise and deep. Excellent imagery. It was probably on purpose to leave out "verse" spacing (can't you tell I'm not a poet??), but it would have made it easier for me to read had there been blocks of lines. Make any sense?
Mona Purvis10/28/09
I went soaring with them, smooth as silk. I marvel at this creation of God and your ability to share it with your readers.

Mona
Betty Castleberry10/28/09
Lovely. Excellent imagery. 'Nuff said.
Jan Ackerson 10/28/09
What a marvelous, delightful gift you have. Just...wow.
Beth LaBuff 10/28/09
Wow! I loved immersing myself in this. Your descriptive phrases are superb! Beautiful artistry here!
Carol Slider 10/28/09
This is the kind of poetry that makes you want to savor each word. Absolutely gorgeous!