The Official Writing Challenge
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Definitely a somber piece yet your words shine through the gloom. Your title very appropriate for the theme. I especially liked this line:
"invisible grieving of the heart yet
Illuminated in twin beams." Very visual.
10/26/09
good imagery. tight reading, no extra words. i felt like it ended too quickly, though. two stanzas to set up, one to reveal and one to finish. i think another transition stanza between middle and end may have been better. great read though. definitely touches the heart and imagination.
10/28/09
Novel descriptions. My favorite line was the one Loren mentioned. Beautiful visual!
10/28/09
Oh, how I loved this one! Perfect in every way.