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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Winter (the season) (08/13/09)

TITLE: Beacon
By Allison Egley
08/19/09


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The howling winds
Echo the cold confines of my heart,
The grey sky reflecting my soul.

Wrapped in a blanket
I stare at the fire;
The flames dance and taunt me.

The blanket only tightens its deadly grip around me;
Threatening to overtake me
And sear my heart forever in its sorrow.

The Bible lays open beside me,
Its words transforming
So I can only see the bad.

Amidst the storm outside
I see the beacon of a distant lighthouse
Cutting through the fog and snow.

A beacon of hope?

The flames stop their dance.
They reach out to me,
Melting my cold heart.

The blanket loosens its grip,
Wrapping me in its warm, soft cocoon.
I am safe.

The words swirl,
Creating a refreshing pool.
My hope is in You.

The pages turn,
The wind dies down.
I am the Resurrection and the life.

The snow stops falling,
Leaving a soft, fresh blanket.
Wash me, and I shall be whiter than snow.

The silence after the storm
Comforts my soul.
My soul waits in silence for God only.

I fall asleep
Safe and sound in His arms.
Come to Me all who are weary...
And I will give you rest.


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All scripture is NASB
Ps. 37:5
Jn. 11:25
Ps. 57:1
Mt. 11:28


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Verna Cole Mitchell 08/21/09
I like the way you've woven together the Scripture and the weather and your reader's thoughts.
Colin Swann08/24/09
I think the penultimate verse is beautiful, but thanks be to God we can find his peace in the storm too. Thanks for this thoughtful devotional piece. Colin
Beth LaBuff 08/24/09
I like your poetic structure. You use some great salsa words, "cold confines," "taunt," "sear," among many others, which (as I understand it) is a strong feature of free verse poetry.

I wished I knew why your MC was having such a struggle. Maybe just a little reference to what in her past caused this winter in her heart. But I'm not sure if that would fit your poem, so… :)

The "beacon of hope" warmed my heart too, with your ending.
Bryan Ridenour08/25/09
I love the line "Beacon of hope." A wonderful free verse poem reminding us of the hope that we have in the true Lighthouse, Jesus. Well done.
Yvonne Blake 08/25/09
Great "salsa" words! I also saw quite a bit of personification! Great job!
Mona Purvis08/26/09
Smooth as silk. This is one that the reader gets to just breathe in.
Mona


   
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