The Official Writing Challenge
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Ooo, I love this modern re-telling of the story. The paragraph that started "During the night..." was a little confusing to be because it started with me thinking she was feeling hopeful, and then changed directions. Otherwise well-done. Great story.
This is a beautiful story of love the way it should be, the way God loves us.
07/30/09
This is an awesome story. It was really moving when you described her cold and hunger. Very good job. And then when her husband came - oh, melted my heart:)
08/01/09
You described the hopelessness of the homeless perfectly...and then the hope of perfect love. Awesome!
08/03/09
Great writing.

I always marvel at the exquisite details you choose to include.

The second sentence in the second paragraph threw me off. I didn't think it fit the harshness you were trying to convey.

Sigh. When he found her?...beautifully, lovingly portrayed. Sigh.
I wondered where this story was taking place: "coppers" and "motorcars" suggest outside the United States, or perhaps sometime in the past; I would have liked a clue. A very minor point in a great well written love story.
08/03/09
Beautiful details and a wonderful retelling.
08/04/09
Captivating writing. I enjoyed reading this story.
This brought tears to my eyes. Sharon, it was just lovely.
It wasn't until the end of the story that I knew who this was about. Well done!
The way you presented this story of redemption through love was beautiful; and yes, romantically complete.
08/06/09
Yay, You, dear. :)
Congrats!
Very well done!!
08/06/09
Beautiful story and a creative re-telling. I love your phrasing and word choices which add richness and depth. Congrats on your win.
Very,very nice.