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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)

TITLE: War Games
By Ruth Neilson
07/15/09


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Three forms crouched in a small grove. The leader, a blond, was scratching out a map in the dirt. His partners nodded as he laid out the battle plan. It was up to them to make the first strike, and they were going to relish in every moment.

"Lock and load boys! It's game time!"

The others nodded in agreement and tugged down bandanas over their faces.

With little more than a hand signal, they moved as a single unit.

"Alpha" ran hard, pounding out the trail, only pausing long enough to radio in to their snitch.

*crackle*Red Robin? *crackle*

*crackle*Red Robin here.*crackle*

*crackle* Current status on the target. *crackle*

*crackle*Status unchanged, Alpha. Mission is a go.*crackle*

Alpha looked back, gave a thumbs up, and motioned to his team. Three fingers, three targets; one attempt before their cover was blown. The trees provided a blessed relief from the heat of the day as the three figures continued on their mission.

Sweat trickled down Alpha's back and mingled with the damp feeling in his pocket. One that he could only hope was perspiration and not his back up weapons... He held up a fist and his team came to a stop just short of entering the clearing.

There. Three targets, just as Red Robin had promised. Lazing happily in the sun, just like cats dozing on a hot summer day.

This was it.

Alpha felt his heart pounding and he took several minutes to catch his breath. There could be no errors in this moment.

Their water guns were primed. With a flick of Alpha's hand, the squad charged.

With a war cry echoing across the field, the targets, their sisters, screamed the first threats of summer vacation.


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Laury Hubrich 07/17/09
Woohoo! Tormenting sisters and summer vacation seem to go together. Not so good for the sisters, though:( LOL. Nice story.
Seema Bagai 07/17/09
Ahhh...boys and water guns. You captured the scene well.
Jim McWhinnie 07/18/09
What more can I say but "that certainly was fun!"
Virgil Youngblood 07/20/09
Did I hear "Vengence is mine", saith the sisters? A sequel lurks in the summer breeze. Fun! Fun!
Christina Banks 07/20/09
Too fun! I used to love playing games like that...only it was us girls sneeking up on the boys with water ballons. I love the way you captured this piece!
Carol Slider 07/20/09
This story was a lot of fun to read! I look forward to "War Games 2: The Sisters Strike Back." :)
Noel Mitaxa 07/20/09
Good fun stuff here, though the suspense may have been slightly watered down ...
Karlene Jacobsen 07/21/09
Oh fun!
Pamela Kliewer07/21/09
Love it! I could picture my brothers doing something like this to me when we were kids! Fun story.
Jan Ackerson 07/22/09
Lots of fun!
Mariane Holbrook07/22/09
This was a great read! I had lots of sibling so I could relate. You're such a good writer! Beaucoup kudos!!!
Patricia Herchenroether07/22/09
Terrific writing. Loved every bit.
Stephanie Craig07/22/09
Nicely written. Makes me want to have a watergun fight.
Sara Harricharan 07/22/09
Uh-oh. I'd hate to think of those guys with the sisters scheming all summer to get back at them. lol. cute and clever.
Catrina Bradley 07/22/09
Very cool! The suspense and excitement build right to the end. I was thinking paintball, and I like that I was wrong when I read the ending. :)
Shirley McClay 07/23/09
Excellent writing! Very fun. Congratulations on your EC!
Mona Purvis07/23/09
You took me to another place...childhood. Every word important and none wasted. Exceptional storytelling!
Mona
Sharon Kane07/23/09
This was fun to read. We have 4 boys, no girls. I used to wish the last had been a girl till I thought of what her life would have been like with 3 big brothers! There is a wonderfully understated portrayal of the brother/sister relationship in your writing. Nice job!
Lynda Schultz 07/23/09
In my schoolyard we girls fought back without the water guns. We just threatened to kiss those nasty boys and they ran like the wind—in the opposite direction.

Great story.