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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Before and After (05/14/09)

TITLE: Dragon in the Milk
By Kristen Hester
05/19/09


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Muddy footprints spotted my freshly mopped floor. Not surprisingly, they led me directly to my future chemist son conducting a science experiment in his previously sparkling bathroom sink. “What are you doing?”

Hunter jumped at my voice. “I’m making a potion.” An empty soap dispenser and flattened toothpaste tube were clues to the main ingredients.

“Clean this mess up NOW!” I knew I should probably encourage his ingenuity, but at the moment I was thinking only of the ladies on the retreat committee who would arrive in thirty minutes for a planning meeting.

Exiting the bathroom, I tripped over a pair of roller blades. “Madison! Come get your skates right now!”

“Just a sec.”

Unfortunately for her, I was in my no-mercy mood. I found her helping her younger brother work a puzzle.

“Isn’t Grayson doing good?” Madison asked proudly. I looked at my watch and then at the puzzle pieces scattered across the room.

“Put up the puzzle and your skates...NOW!” This time there were no arguments.

I took a deep breath and tried to calm myself. Coordinating a women’s retreat in addition to my already hectic schedule was making me tense.

When the ladies arrived for the meeting, our kids played outside while we planned. “I have some bad news.” Stacey looked apologetic.

“What?” I wanted the retreat to be perfect, so her tone worried me.

“Debra called this morning. She can’t lead worship.”

“You’re kidding!” My disappointment was obvious. “She agreed to do it six months ago. Who are we going to get now?”

“Is something wrong with Debra?” Kathy asked with the concern I had failed to demonstrate.

“Her mother has cancer.”

“That’s terrible.” Kathy said.

“Yes,” I agreed, but ashamedly my mind was on finding her replacement more than her mother.

Madison appeared in the doorway interrupting our meeting. “Hunter’s hurt.”

I excused myself and found him laying on the ground moaning. “Oh, Hunter,” I complained as I picked him up and sat him beside me with an ice pack. We continued our meeting, but he was uncharacteristically quiet and looked sleepy, which caused me concern. As my friends were leaving, I heard Hunter vomit.

Two days later, after numerous missed diagnoses, Hunter was transported by helicopter to a trauma hospital were surgeons removed a massive blood clot from his head. The next seventy-hours were a blur of doctor reports, beeping monitors, sleepless nights, and ceaseless prayers.

“I want a chance to tell him I’m sorry for being frustrated with him,” I confessed to my husband after his surgery. He was still unconscious, but I hadn’t left his room since we’d arrived.

My husband squeezed my hand. “I know.”

The next day they started decreasing his meds and we began to hope for a recovery. When he woke up, he was upset about the tubes down his throat, which was a good sign. His agitation and complaints were music to my ears.

Remarkably, he was discharged with forty stitches in his head only seven days after the doctors had sawed into his skull. “I’m expecting a full recovery,” our surgeon told us with a smile. “You’re very, very fortunate.”

Life slowly returned to normal after the accident, but I wasn’t the same. When we met to discuss the retreat, my friends noticed the difference.

“We still haven’t found a worship leader.” Kathy looked panicked.

“It’ll be fine,” I said. “We’ll play a CD and I’ll do a Milli Vanilli if needed.”

“But...” Kathy began.

“But, nothing. What’s important is that we worship.”

“The tablecloths don’t match the centerpieces.” Stacey actually looked scared.

“These aren’t important issues,” I said calmly, “and I refuse to worry about them.”

At breakfast the next morning Grayson knocked over a large cup of milk. “Uh oh.” His eyes were wide with fear.

I stared at the milk for a moment. “The shape of that spill reminds me of a dragon. But he needs a tail.” I put my hand down in the wet liquid and spread it to form a tail. My kids stared at me in disbelief. “What do you think?”

“Dragons have wings,” Madison said hesitantly.

“Why don’t you add the wings,” I encouraged.

Madison timidly put her hand in the milk and drew wings. Hunter smiled as he added fire breath. Soon, we’d spread milk across the entire table surface.

Almost losing Hunter had indeed changed me. Before the accident, I never would have seen the dragon in the milk.


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Sara Harricharan 05/21/09
Hmmm...very frantic pacing and a mild ending. Whew! Busy stuff going on here! I'm sure there are many who can relate to this! And I'm glad she can see the dragon in the milk now. ^_^
Loren T. Lowery 05/21/09
So often it is just things like this that cause us to see life from a different angle and the new perspective makes all the difference in not only our world, but the ones we love as well.
Janice Fitzpatrick05/22/09
This is so good. It sometimes does take a severe circumstance to change our viewpoint. Thank God for all of the times of spilled milk in our lives and for giving us a chance to see the dragons..if we just let Him:0). I really like this piece.:0)
Emily Gibson05/22/09
Painful story and powerful illustration. well done!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/23/09
This story of a lesson in priorities is beautifully told.
Joanne Sher 05/24/09
Wonder if this is who I think it is. What a fabulous lesson she learned. Love the transformation of her character.
Joanne Sher 05/24/09
Wonder if this is who I think it is. What a fabulous lesson she learned. Love the transformation of her character.
Patricia Herchenroether05/24/09
Many times have I learned an important lesson from brokenness. I see I'm not alone in needing reminders about priorities. Well done.
Sharon Kane05/25/09
I was hooked from the excellent title all the way through. "Live in the present" This is a lesson I keep coming back to. You presented it so powerfully and movingly. Good job!
Connie Dixon05/25/09
Sometimes it takes a tragedy to wake us up to what is really important. Great lesson, great writing!
Betty Castleberry05/27/09
The end of this had me smiling and in tears - at the same time.
I enjoyed this well-written story. Kudos.
Eliza Evans 05/27/09
What a wonderful, heart-warming story! Fab title, too. :)
Carole Robishaw 05/27/09
Hmmm, what can I say except: I really related with this and found it very "right on target" for my life. I need to stop and see the dragon.

Well written, thank you
Gregory Kane05/28/09
One thing that struck me about your excellent story was the way that the woman's fierceness was preserved even after her epiphany. But instead of obsessing on trivilaities, she instead gave short shrift to the petty sillinesses that can command our Christian lives. I dare say I'll have plenty of time to put this lesson into practice as my sons are forever spilling stuff!
Rachel Rudd05/28/09
Such a beautiful story, such a beautiful message! Congratuations on the win!
LauraLee Shaw05/28/09
So glad to see this one place, Kristen! Congratulations, my friend!!!!
Loren T. Lowery 05/28/09
Way to go Kristen. There was such a great message in your story (as there usually is) and I'm glad it was so well received. Congratulations on your EC placement!
Lollie Hofer05/28/09
Was this an autobiographical story? Didn't I see something similar to this in the prayer request section a few months ago? Either way, you did a remarkable job capturing the MC's frustrations and then the wonderful change that came about after the accident. Loved the dragon in the milk! I could see the mother and children playing in the milk. I need to have a few more of those experiences with my grandchildren as well.
Charla Diehl 05/28/09
Great writing. God is such a merciful teacher as He can take any crisis and use it for good--the mother's transformation will bless her and others forever. So glad this had a happy ending. Loved the image of the dragon in the milk.
Sonya Leigh06/01/09
Sorry I'm so late in congratulating you on your EC placement this week. Well done!


   
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