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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Hot and Cold (04/09/09)

TITLE: Passion to Follow
By Ruth Neilson


Visitors? I wasn't expecting any—haven't had any in...I don't remember now. I don't have warm bread, or even cold water, but come in! Come in! Take a seat. Tell me why you came here. Oh, you want to hear what I have to say?

Am I cold? No, I'm not. In reality, I stopped feeling the physical temperatures a long time ago. Oh...I've been here maybe some good three years ago or so—ever since the Emperor Nero had me thrown in this place.

I've watched my brothers and my sisters burn hot with the passion for our Lord—and never falter once as they were led to their deaths. I'm a special case, you see. I walked with our Lord.

I was there, huddled against the cold night's air around a hot fire the night that I betrayed Him. I saw the cold nails pierce His wrists and feet.

The cold...cold nails...

I wonder how they are going to feel when they pierce my warm flesh? Will it burn like a hot brand? Or...will my Lord miraculously allow me not to feel this pain?

I went into my Lord's empty tomb! Even felt His hands—hot with a Heavenly power that I could not understand. I was forgiven and then commanded to tend to my Lord’s chosen people. I was there, that early morning when fire fell from heaven, burning and purifying those of us in the Upper Room.

I guess it is only right that I would taste the nails. Though, I am not worthy to die the same way that my Lord did. I wonder if the centurions have a warm heart or one that is frozen by their evil works?

I'm sorry, here I am just rambling away while you freeze to death. Here, take my cloak. It's not much, but it will keep you a little bit warmer. Where was I?

Purifying fire? Oh! You see, young man, my Lord's sacrifice was not just for Jews but also for Greeks and Romans. Before my Lord changed my life, my heart was cold...as the coldest winter night. Now, my heart is burning hot with passion to tell others.

I know that I will die for this. I know that some day soon the soldiers will come for me.

Quiet. Do you hear them coming?

I must be quick then.

You have a choice; there is no middle ground now that you have heard the truth. Will you become hot with the passion of my Lord or will you walk away and become like the soldiers here, cold? The choice is yours. Choose wisely.

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Verna Cole Mitchell 04/17/09
Your title fitted your story well with the example of the disciple and the question: Do I have the passion to follow. Inspirationally written.
Sonya Leigh04/18/09
I like this soliloquy. Wish I could hear all the apostles speak their minds, just like this, in this present day.
Chely Roach04/19/09
This was very touching...it is easy for modern followers to forget what a real martyr looks like. Well done.
Jan Ackerson 04/19/09
I love this monologue, and would love to see it performed on a sparse stage--very powerful.
Catrina Bradley 04/19/09
Great voice. Peter's inner thoughts are a somber contrast to his fire-branded speech, and they add depth to the character. It seems to me he tells his visitors they need to make a choice, but he never really tells them the details of the options. It leaves me to assume his visitors already know the Good News, which isn't as satisfying. I'd like to see a little basic gospel & salvation sermonette sparked with that fire!
Kristen Hester04/19/09
Ohh, very nice. I loved Peter's voice. Good job!
Carol Slider 04/19/09
A very moving glimpse into the mind and life of Peter. Well done.
Dena Wilson04/20/09
I loved the voice of the story. Even though it is Peter the reader can relate it to the time we are in now.
Pamela Kliewer04/20/09
I loved this. Your leaving us with the question moved me. What choice will I make when my Savior asks me to obey? Well done.
Sharlyn Guthrie04/20/09
"Choose wisely." What a challenge! Excellent POV.
Dennis Ricci04/21/09
Strength and warmth ... the Spirit of God portrayed beautifully. I'm very inspired by this work as a Christ follower and as a writer.
Joshua Janoski04/21/09
You brought me into your story and made me feel as though I was face-to-face with Peter listening to him speak. The message in this is a powerful one, and I like the POV you chose to convey it.