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10/30/08
This is a touching story of compassion and friendship. So glad Tina was blessed with a friend like Karen. Great descriptive writing throughout and fit the topic perfectly.
Oh, this is very good. I liked your character depiction and the ending was perfect,“Tina opened the little cardboard door and found a chocolate angel behind it. An angel? People said that everyone had a guardian angel. Did she have one? She looked at Karen with her sparkling eyes and loving smile. Maybe she did.” Well done!
10/31/08
I love your ending. Good descriptions, especially of the emotions.
Touching, vivid descriptions, believable, and very satisfying ending.
This is very touching. The pace and flow is just right. Great job!
11/03/08
Great job - loved the way the indifference and hostility covered the hurt. And the outcome!
Awe, it's so hard to feel unloved and unwanted. I'm glad Karen was there to give love to a lonely friend.
This was a beautiful story.