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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: The Game of Life (09/11/08)

TITLE: Battle of a Lifetime
By Allison Egley
09/17/08


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"Imagine with me for a bit."

I closed my eyes.

**********

"I’m bored," I said.

"Me too, Eric. What do you want to do?"

"I don’t know. Want to play Army Men? I’ll get the bucket from my room."

"Okay!"

"I’ll be the good guys, and Nathan, you can be the bad guys."

I lined up my army men, ready for the fight.

*********

"Okay men, you know our target. Now remember, the enemy could be anywhere. Be careful for civilians too. Most of them should be out of the way. And if you have to take one, as much as I hate it, this is war, and you don’t always have a choice. It may not be out land we’re defending, but everyone has the right to peace and freedom. Now go out there and get them!"

"Sergeant, we’ve got enemy troops coming. I don’t know how many of them there are."

"Take out as many as you can."

"They keep coming, Sergeant. It’s almost like they’re multiplying as we watch. I’m not sure how long we can hold them off. Bring in the reinforcements!"

"B Team! Go! Surround A Team and help them out."

"It’s working, Sergeant. They enemy is decreasing. But they won’t retreat."

"If you can, surround them and take them out. Do it one man at a time, if you have to. I’ve got C Team ready to go if you need them."

"Better send them in, Sergeant. This enemy is tough."

"Yes, Soldier, but we are tougher. We’ve just got to believe it. And make the enemy believe it too.

"Soldier, how are things from your stance?"

"I… I think we’ve got most of them, Sergeant. There may be a few in hiding yet, but… well, I think we’ve accomplished the goal."

"Great job. Bring in the rest of the troops for a debrief.

"How many civilians did we loose?"

"I don’t have an exact count, Sergeant. It was more than we wanted, obviously. One is too many; but it could have been worse."

"Some innocent loss is inevitable, but if we can keep it to a minimum, that's good. Now what about the land?"

"Well Sir, you can see most of the damage for yourself. It’s certainly not pretty, but we saved what we could."

"Affirmative. The civilians should be able to rebuild. We’ll just have to bring them in slowly."

***********

Nathan gave me a high-five. "Good job, Eric. You fought well. And... well... I’m glad the good guys won."

I returned the high-five. "Me too, Nathan."

***********

I opened my eyes again and looked at the doctor.

"And that, Eric, is how the chemotherapy is going to help you fight the cancer that’s invaded your body."


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Author's Notes

Key:
Troops = Chemotherapy drugs
Enemy = Caner
Civilians = Immune system
City = Patient

September is National Childhood Cancer Awareness Month.

I have fought the good fight, I have finished the course, I have kept the faith; II Timothy 4:7 (NASB)


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Kristen Hester 09/18/08
This is very interesting. I had NO idea you were talking about cancer. Good writing!
Dee Yoder 09/19/08
When I discovered what the MC was fighting at the end, the whole story made a big impact! Very touching story.
Lori Othouse 09/19/08
What a great analogy! I also had no idea, but the ending was really powerful. Great job!
Anne Linington09/19/08
This is very innovative, though I confess to skipping to the end, and the re-reading carefully in the light of the explanatory notes.
Joy Faire Stewart09/19/08
I was very touched by this story since my mom is a lung and breast cancer survivor. Thanks for writing this. Excellent!
Marijo Phelps09/20/08
Enjoyed the story and loved the twist at the end.
Shelley Ledfors 09/21/08
Excellent! I love to be surprised by something at the end. This piece (and the title, too) become loaded with meaning once one reads the last bit. Very well done!
Jan Ackerson 09/21/08
This DEFINITELY has to be published in a cancer newsletter!
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/23/08
The end really slipped up on me here; then the whole story came alive.
Peter Stone10/02/08
What a wonderful way to explain chemotherapy to a child.


   
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