The Official Writing Challenge
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09/05/08
I love the parallels between the girl and the horse. I hope this is part of a longer story. I'd certainly read more. Very nicely done.
I liked the inner thoughts you revealed throughout the story. I felt the story was more about the girl's and the horse's untamable spirits, so I think a different title would suit this better...just my opinion.
09/08/08
I love the strength of the MC and I agree that this feels like it needs a bigger story to do it justice!
09/08/08
I agree, this was a good story, and too short. I want to read the next chapter, where she successfully rides the horse around the corral!
09/10/08
Nicely done! Strong character! Looking forward (hopefully?) to reading the rest of the story!
This was wonderful! I liked the way you portrayed her frustration with 'white' ways. Good job!