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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Memory (07/10/08)

TITLE: If You Were Just a Memory
By Stephanie Bullard
07/15/08


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If you were just a memory.
And I pray I do not live to see that day.
But if it happened you existed in just the recesses of my mind:
What would I recall about you?

I would remember what you looked like:
Your hair. Your eyes. That smile so unique.
The way you walk across a room, run crazy wild, or dance without a care.
The way you roll your eyes when mad.

I’d remember what you sound like.
The brightness of your laugh; beauty of your song.
The conversations we would share, my ears take in the sweetness of your voice.
The way that you pronounce my name.

I would remember how you felt.
Your hand on my shoulder or patting my hair.
How you wrap your arms around my neck and hug me with your entire heart.
The way you fit so neatly in my arms and my soul.

But if you were just a memory.
And I pray I do not live to see that day.
But if it happened you existed in just the recesses of my mind:
What would I recall about me?

What thoughts would crowd my mind just then?
If the time came when I could not see your face,
And I was left with no more than the memories I keep of me and you?
If I were forced to view my heart?

Would I see the times I lashed out?
The times I turned you back or shut you out?
Would I see the times I had no time when time was all you wanted of me?
When I put me first and not you?

Would I hear the times I grumbled?
When I barked out words that carried too much bite?
Would I hear the times I tuned you out because I wouldn’t make myself care?
Or dismissed your thoughts with a word?

Would I feel the gruff frustration?
The impatience when we couldn’t get along?
Would I feel the times I felt that you were keeping me from what I wanted?
The bother of your needs and wants?

Or would I feel the joy I felt,
Of lifting you up and pushing you onward?
Would I hear praise, encouragement, prayers I prayed that God would give you such joy?
Would I see the smiles that you caused?

If you were just a memory,
Would I know that I held you better than me?
May I begin to love you with God’s love; and see that what I do today,
Will be tomorrow’s memories.


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Emily Gibson07/17/08
Absolutely perfect! This hits the nail on the head for this topic. Really well done.
Betsy Markman07/17/08
Beautiful. I'll be back to re-read this one more than once, I suspect.
Leigh MacKelvey07/17/08
Very nicely done. I liked the line about barking and then words that bite. Great comparisons. I also liked that the reader is able to insert anyone into the poem as the person the speaker is talking to ... a woman, a child, a grandparent and so on. This makes it become a personal poem to the one reading it. You made good use of the topic by making the memory a person!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/18/08
Your assessment of your loved one, along with your introspection of your own thoughts--all put into poetic form--make this a treasure.
Jason Swiney07/19/08
Tremendous writing, however, you got my attention, I'm going to quit reading articles and go play with my daughter for awhile. This spoke directly to me and I assume it will get many other readers as well. Nice message.
Joanne Sher 07/19/08
Oh, how thought-provoking and evocative. I will be thinking on this one for a very long time. Thank you for this. Wonderful.
Melanie Kerr 07/20/08
Isn't it interesting that our memories of our own action tend to be quite negative - we see only our mistakes? But often when we remember the actions of others it tends to be the good stuff! Maybe it's just me that does that! Great poem.
Loren T. Lowery07/22/08
Touching, if not a bit convicting at times. I loved the flow of this piece, as if it streamed directly from the heart.