The Official Writing Challenge
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Well this was written differently. Like its uniqueness.
06/13/08
Lots going on here - enjoyed your two characters for sure!

A bit of work on flow might help some - it felt jumpy to me!

Great title - I enjoyed this read!
This had me snorting and giggling. I loved the TM after the name of all the garden products - zany. I think what really made me choke was "Let’s take my Chihuahua, Petey, and my snub-nose 357 Magum; that should be enough protection." Personally, I think the Chihuahua was a bit of an overkill, they can be vicious killers - the magnum would have been enough : -)

It was great to see that after such a traumatic start, Julia Flo's reunion reputation remained intact. Fun read : -)

06/21/08
Thanks you masters for your expertise and encouragement that we writers experience from you, right from starting out as beginners.