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05/08/08
Cute and clever - love the characterization of the boys, and especially the "walkie-talkie" talk between Mom and Dad. Great title, too.Delightful slice of life.
05/08/08
You must have sons! Lovely story.
05/09/08
Chuckling and wondering if this story, or any part of it, is true. This was an entertaining read.
05/10/08
Great fun, this one! You have 'boy banter' down perfectly.
05/10/08
I loved the story of these two mischievous boys and was glad to see the parents on the winning side.
05/12/08
So cool.. LOVED this story! The last line was classic!
05/12/08
Love the nostalgic feel of this, the tone of adventure, the awesome twist at the end.

The grammar of your first sentence bothers me just a tad; you might want to re-work it so it doesn't end with "...of my twin brother and I."

Other than that, a grin from beginning to end.
05/13/08
Not only was the story engaging and amusing, but the ending where the parents got their revenge using the same tools as the kids, was a riot.
05/13/08
What an entertaining and well-written story. I know how the twins felt when they couldn't eat a dinner they would have relished because they had overstuffed themselves with 'stolen' cookies. That was only the beginning of their pain.
05/13/08
And the moral is... never try to outsmart your parents. Loved the planning of the boys and their code names - especially rat-a-tat-Pat. Great job!
05/14/08
What a fun romp through boyhood.

Loved mama and papa bear.

05/14/08
ROFL! I liked this, the touch of spy and of course all that kid fun! I loved the walkie talkie handles! Cute! ^_^
05/14/08
Such a fun story! I was right there eating cookies with them...great job!
05/15/08
Bobwhite, Fat Pat, and Rat-a-ta Pat. I loved the names. I also loved the mom and dad using the walkie talkies at the end. This is the kind of fun piece that is a pleasure to read.