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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Father (as in paternal parent, not God) (04/10/08)

TITLE: Never Comin' Back
By Johnna Stein
04/15/08


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Daddy, where you go?
Gone?
Thatís what Mama says.
He gone.
He done left, Girl.
Gone.
Ainít never cominí back.

Daddy, where you go?
Gone?
To the mines?
Makiní some money.
Gone far away.
Maybe you come back.
Maybe you miss me.
Maybe you sad
Like me.
Mama says
You ainít never cominí back.

Daddy, where you go?
Gone?
To South Africa?
Looking for work,
Hoping for life.
Just looking and hoping.
Hoping and looking.
Gone far away.
Iím thinkiní
Maybe
You ainít never cominí back.

Daddy, where you go?
Gone?
Mama sick.
Again.
Mama need you.
I do my best.
But,
Mama need you.
She cry out
In her sleep.
Mama says
You ainít never cominí back.

Daddy, where you go?
Gone?
Mama sick.
Real sick.
She donít talk.
Her eyes closed.
Mama sleepiní.
She gone.
She with
Jesus.
She ainít never cominí back.

Daddy, where you go?
Gone?
Five years.
Too much time.
Preacher man
Take me in.
He my daddy
Now.
He hug me.
He good to me.
Maybe you come back.
Maybe you miss me.
Maybe you happy now
Like me.
Itís okay.
You gone.
You ainít never cominí back.


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Christine Miles04/17/08
I like the voice you've used in this. It adds to the inexplicable sadness. Well done.
Laury Hubrich 04/19/08
Very nice job. It was unique and most revealing.
Sharlyn Guthrie04/20/08
Haunting, but very very good!
04/22/08
Oh how very sad! Your clipped words made the story-poem all the more powerful...Well done! So very well done. It is hard to tell a whole story in a short poem, but you did it. You used word pictures to help the reader get the poin....Daddy, never coming back....Helen