The Official Writing Challenge
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Great fun. Thanks!
HA! They were surprised... I just wrote a long review and it went away... so I need to tell you I loved your story.. HOPING it was true.. it made me happy for them... good descriptions...
Great atmosphere - I SO didn't want it to end when it did! I hope you continue this at some point. I would LOVE to read the rest. :)
I agree that I would like to read more. This has the makings of a novel. This was a very good read.
I have only one complaint about this story.......I wanted it to go on...and on...and on. I wanted to read more. It was like a saga, and this was only the introductory chapter...I know you couldn't have made it longer, as we are limited in our wordage. However, I just wanted you to know how I felt about this story. It is EXCELLENT. I hope you intend to make a longer story of it some day--maybe a book? You described the two children so well. I could just see the little girl, with her 14-year-old attitude. Her brother handled her well...Oh, this was SO good! Congratulations!...Helen