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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: From What Bound Her
By Leigh MacKelvey
03/11/08


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How curiously He is able to strip
their indignant scorn down to bare
humility, a burned-out house

undressed to its wood frame.
He ousts their wails of outrage
the way a whelping mutt

is booted out the back door
and left to whimper on the
steps in the cold night.

How suddenly he exposes
their private sham. Their untidy
closet quakes in embarrassment

as the door is flung open
for all to see, a hidden mess,
the shamble of their shame.

He does this the day he pulls her
out in front of the men, what a disgrace.
They cannot see the grace within the

disgrace of a poor woman who is singled out
in the temple on a Sabbath when she
should not be there at all.

It’s against the rules made
by the men who are rule keepers outside,
rule breakers inside and who

would like nothing more than to
throw her out and get on with their
Sabbath lesson.

He sees her bent form, a fusion
of bones, a rigid mass, utterly
uncomfortably tangled, a mangle

of agony and spirit bound by Satan,
Unable to straighten herself
for eighteen years.

She comes, she sees her time
for healing on this “un-legal” day,
a day of no healing by rule.

But he says that the men
who yell out for no healing
on a “No-Healing” day

lead their donkeys from their stalls
to water. (Ah now, is that not against the rules?)
and why should she not be set free

after eighteen long years?
This Is Her Time,
Now Is Her Time,

and how curiously, how suddenly
he heals her and the Sabbath runs
on through the other six days.




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Reference: Luke 13: 10-11


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Sally Hanan03/13/08
Brilliant. I love the hesitancy of each line and the way it flows to the next stanza.
Jan Ackerson 03/14/08
How wonderful! My favorite line: "they cannot see the grace within the disgrace..." Stunning. This flows like a gentle river, almost compelling the reader to keep going, keep going, the best part's coming...I love it!
Sheri Gordon03/14/08
Wonderful writing. I usually don't "get" poems like this--but I got this one. :) And I love it. Perfect for the topic.

This is my favorite part: "rule keepers outside,
rule breakers inside" Excellent description.
Joanne Sher 03/15/08
Wonderfully done - I could picture it so clearly. Very good.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/16/08
Each word seclected and placed with a master's skill in this marvelous poem. I loved "shamble of their shame" and "grace within the disgrace," as well as many other wonderful phrases.
Lyn Churchyard03/17/08
Oh, I love this story! You have done a great job of expanding the two small verses into a smorgasbord of sight and sound for me. I loved the lines “Their untidy closet quakes in embarrassment as the door is flung open for all to see, a hidden mess,”. Wonderful!
Loren T. Lowery03/17/08
This is such a great story from the Bible and re-told beautifuly in this poetic form. I'm no poet, but I certainly enjoyed this and its message.
william price03/17/08
Lots of great lines and images. The message was right on as well. God bless.
Marita Vandertogt03/18/08
I can see her, I can feel her pain... this is beautifully done.
Henry Clemmons03/18/08
Amazing. What I really like about this, is that it reads with such a masculane voice, yet told from such a tender heart. When read out loud, this gives me goosebumps. Very good.
Dianne Janak03/19/08
ABSOLUTELY heart stopping, beautifully written, and a keeper for me... gives me hope once again... Dianne J.
Mandy White03/19/08
Beautiful job. I truly admire poets!
Debbie Wistrom03/19/08
This sent to to my Bible, thanks for including the verse!!!
So much went into this, you see behind the scenes of this buried story. Thank you and bless you for writing and sharing this insightful piece.
Perfect title as well.
Sara Harricharan 03/19/08
This is really different here, the lines and way they flowed into each other and they were able to keep the story going. Very creative, and very descriptive! I like it! ^_^
Shayne Catoe03/19/08
Grace and truth are pictured hand in hand by the healing and attitude in the end. Thank you for bringing this lovely story to us.
Pat Guy 03/19/08
Wow ... truly wow. I thoroughly savored this flow of exquisite words so exquisitely placed. I wish I could write like this.