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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)

TITLE: The Wages of Kindness
By Patty Wysong
03/05/08


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With his baby daughter, Rosie, sleeping in his arms, Micah watched as the big body was lowered into the shallow grave. Lord, is this the answer to my prayer? Big Jake hadn't been a good man. He was mean with his mouth and mean with his hands, and no one mourned his death. His children seemed uncertain, but his widow, Jessica, stood silently, holding them close. She was a woman with a strong spirit and a stronger faith.
Rosie stirred, her mouth puckering to cry. Micah gently bounced her, hoping she would hold out a little longer. When he looked up, Jessica was walking to her wagon. Micah followed her, watching as she reassured her children.

“Jess?” Micah called as he neared her fire.

With a smile she took the baby, “There's beans in the pot, if you'd like some, Micah.” She adjusted her light shawl, murmuring quietly to Rosie.

It's too soon to talk to her, Father.

Jessica held out a leather pouch to Micah. “This belongs to you.”

Micah eyed it, mentally weighing how much was there. “No, it's yours. Your wages for wet nursing Rosie these weeks.”

With a gentle toss, it landed beside him.

“I would never charge anyone to nurse their motherless baby.” Jessica caressed Rosie's head through the shawl. “This little one eased the pain of losing my own. She's brought comfort and joy to me. Jake had no business charging you. I know why the amount was so high, too.”

A steely glint entered Micah's eyes. He lowered his voice, so it wouldn't carry to the children playing nearby. “Did he tell you I was paying to ensure he didn't lift his hand against you or the children? Did he tell you that?”

Jessica's eyes searched his. “No,” she whispered. “He didn't tell me that.” She looked down at Rosie and gently stroked her cheek before looking back up. “Thank you. I wondered why he had stopped.”

“Did you love him?” Lord, I can't believe I asked her that! She just came from burying her husband.

Jessica looked into the dying fire. “No. I never did.”

“Why did you marry him?”

A shudder went through her. “Pa didn't believe that Jake had forced me so he made me marry him. Pa's heart gave out shortly after overhearing Jake brag about it to his friends.”

Micah's hands and jaw clenched convulsively.

Jessica turned to Micah and smiled. “It's been a long six years, but God kept us safe and got us through. I accepted Christ after a Christian lady nursed me when Jake was on a binge, so there has been some good come from it.”

Did any good come from my marriage, Lord?

“Did you love Rhonda?” Jessica asked.

“I loved who she pretended to be but she was spoiled and self-centered. I'd hoped having a baby would help her outgrow all that, but...”

“Don't blame yourself, Micah. You have Rosie, now.”

Good did come from those years; I have Rosie.

Jessica's children stopped playing and leaned against her, silently studying Micah. With a smile he reached into his vest pocket and withdrew candy he had brought for them. He offered it as he would to a skittish animal. With round eyes they looked to Jessica for permission. She nodded then watched as they plucked the candy from his hand and whispered their thanks.

Micah's heart ached. “You don't need to be afraid anymore.” Their shy smiles gave him hope. Lord, I want to take care of them, and Jessica.

A neighbor's voice carried from nearby. “I'm tellin' ya', Micah should jest marry Jess. They're a matched pair.” Harriet being shushed made Micah laugh and Jessica's face glow.

“She's right, you know,” Micah said.

Jessica's startled eyes flew to him.

“Do you think you could trust me not to hurt you or the children?”

“Oh, Micah, even that time you were furious with Rhonda you never raised your hand against her, and you're a kind man; I've seen that. I completely trust you.”

Micah smiled, his hope soaring. “And through all these weeks I've seen your unselfishness and love for others. Would you marry me? I know Jake just died, but...”

Harriet marched up, grinning. “Thet goat's been dead plenty long enough!”

From nearby someone called out, “Harriet, let the girl answer the question!” Micah laughed and looked at Jessica.

She smiled and nodded. “Yes, I'll marry you.”

Harriet let loose a whoop. “Call the preacher; she said yes!”


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Sharlyn Guthrie 03/08/08
I love stories from this time period. I got a little confused about who was who at the beginning. Once I reread and got that straightened out, I enjoyed the story very much.
Deborah Engle 03/08/08
Great story. I want more!
Holly Westefeld03/08/08
I love how you packed so much in to so little space, and, of course, the happy ending, which I think I would call a gold lining. Your gentle injection of humor was masterful.
I, too, needed to reread, but I think that had more to do with digestion than writing.
The title was terrific!
Betty Castleberry03/09/08
Oh, I like this. I sense a lot of history here. I would like to know more. Very good read.
Karen Wilber 03/10/08
I enjoyed this beautiful love story with its double silver lining.
Sheri Gordon03/11/08
This was a very fun story to read. The dialogue was perfect. I was also a little confused at the beginning, with the different characters. But this is a very good story--I'd like to know more.
Seema Bagai 03/11/08
An enjoyable story. The beginning was confusing. Once I figured out who all the characters were, it was easier to read. I want to know more of the back story of these people.
Debbie Wistrom03/11/08
Perfect title! I saw the proposal coming and was so glad it did. I like the part about the old goat. I would have liked it to have come from the widow though, but I'm crazy like that. Yes I think you must pursue this direction.
Henry Clemmons03/11/08
Ah, a true writer! I liked very much. Great heart and soul. Thanks for sharing.
LauraLee Shaw03/11/08
I love this piece. You can write, girl!
Harriet let loose a whoop. “Call the preacher; she said yes!”
OK, LOVE that ending! Well done. :)
Joanne Sher 03/12/08
I LOVE your period pieces - do it, girl! You are wonderful at setting like this.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/12/08
I love your story that took me on a journey from present to past, from unkindness to kindness, from sadness to happiness, from a funeral to a wedding. Wonderful writing. I'd like more of their story.
Mandy White03/12/08
Period pieces are my favorite. Great story!
Sara Harricharan 03/12/08
ROFL! That last line is hilarious, I love Harriet. What a character! The story held the somber hint but fit all right with everything else. I liked how he offered the kids candy and how he'd paid the man to keep Jess safe. That certainly said a lot for him. Great job. ^_^
Jan Ackerson 03/12/08
Love it, love it, love it. Oh, and did I mention? I love it? Best part about it--Harriet, who takes it from being a very good little romance to being an EXCELLENT little romance.
Chely Roach03/12/08
This was SO incredible! I absolutely loved it, and romance is NOT my genre...
Sherry Castelluccio 03/12/08
Ok, when are we going to get part two? That was just amazing. I'd really like to see more of these characters. Well done!
Joshua Janoski03/12/08
This one is going on my favorites list. One of my favorite entries this week. I loved the internal dialogue of Micah. It was a very warm and fun love story.

You did a wonderful job with this period piece. I would like to see more of them from you. :)
Laury Hubrich 03/14/08
What a hopeless romantic you are, Patty dear! Great story.
Love you,
Laury
Beth LaBuff 03/16/08
Amazing and beautiful! I love it too Peej! I was carried away with your words! Your title is soo good and a great play on words.
Catrina Bradley 04/07/08
Peej, I'm so sorry I missed this one! Wonderful writing, and a great love story - joy from ashes. :)
Kristen Hester 04/07/08
I am so glad Jan used this is an example of characterization! It's what led me here and I LOVE this story. Please write more. This is wonderful. I love romances and period pieces and you did both of these masterfully. Bravo!
Patricia Turner10/01/08
I got here late after being late to Jan's class and am so glad she used your wonderful story. I hope it's the beginning of a novel. I'd love to read more about these folks.
Diana Dart 10/21/08
This is not only a beautiful story (it has me almost cheering aloud for Micah!), but a great lesson on characterization for a newbie like me! Thanks for the whole thing.


   
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