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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)

TITLE: After the Vomit
By Leigh MacKelvey
03/02/08


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“ I can’t hold it in any longer,” one of the men says, then before he cans find a discreet area, he vomits his life all over creation. A domino effect takes place as the other men and several women spew their lives all over the ground and sink down amid the slop.

The men attempt to pick the chunks of devastation from their beards and the women take scarves and half-heartedly mop up the piles of unbelief. Embarrassment is not an issue; bewilderment is.

“ How can it be?” “Was it all a lie?” Whispers spread throughout the group. There are no answers, not now.

Their lives end the moment the news is delivered. Some were “on the spot” and saw it first hand. Never mind. Either way, all stomachs are queasy. You know how something dreadful happens and you wake up in the morning? For a couple of mindless moments, you don’t remember, then you do; and you feel as if you’re in a nightmare? All you want is to escape the nightmare and go back to life as it was. That’s exactly how this group responds to the sorrow.

Their emotions spread in slimy pools of regurgitation all over the ground; their heartstrings sever into pieces of gag; their passion, passionless.

All this owing to the death of the Master, the living song they put all their hopes, their faith, their dreams upon.

But, oh, they know not of the new life, the life that will take place of the one before; an offering to all, with no retched odor to be spewed over all they think they know ...the life that will be their own ...

in only three days time.


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Jan Ackerson 03/06/08
Well, you certainly can't get more extremely than this "dark cloud" and the subsequent "silver lining"! As graphic as this is, I think it's also very realistic, and the juxtaposition of the horrific and the splendrous is all the more riveting. This isn't a piece of writing that one can breeze mindlessly through--and the last 5 words redeem it, as He redeemed us.
Amy Michelle Wiley 03/08/08
Ewww, I can smell it! I could only skim this, but the last sentence was awesome (lol).
Catrina Bradley 03/09/08
I will definitely take this image with me - men and women vomiting their lives, spewing them onto the ground. The image conveys how deep the disciples' grief must have been, and how they must have doubted, during those days before their Messiah rose. Not an easy read, but truth isn't always easy to take in. And the silver lining to come - a perfect ending.
Patty Wysong03/10/08
Well, this was NOT an easy read!! (did I mention that I'm about to sit down to supper? LoL) The last line saves it. I'm so very thankful--in more ways than one!
Sheri Gordon03/11/08
My first thought was, "This is gross," and then when I finished I thought, "Not particularly creative, 'cause we all know the 'ultimate' silver lining story."

But then I realized that I didn't know the story the way you told it. I never actually thought about the realities of what the disciples went through--and your writing sure brought those realities to life.

Very good descriptions, and very creative retelling (or telling) of the day after.