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02/21/08
How heart breaking--even more so because I know this happens. The baby's name threw me off and made me think you were personifying the insect cicadas. This is powerful--I just wish it never happened.
02/21/08
A very heartrending story. Sadly, this really does happen.
Good writing!
02/22/08
Sad and a bit creepy. A well-written piece.
WOW, bold submission here and right on topic! Thanks for the walk on the dark side.
02/24/08
Very sad story. And yes, true colic only lasts for 12 weeks, but I had a baby with 'colic' for 10 months :) Good job with a sad topic.
02/24/08
Short, impactful, no more words needed.
If you were trying to cause a most unpleasant feeling in the pit of the stomach, you succeeded.

Red ink: I have come to expect better editing in Masters. I presume you meant "a swig of his soda."
"There nothing they could do for it."