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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "It's No Use Crying over Spilt Milk" (without using the actual phrase or literal exampl (02/07/08)

TITLE: Condemned
By Sharlyn Guthrie
02/13/08


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The Heart speaks

How could you be so ignorant, my friend,
when you agreed your graceless hand to lend?
Did you believe for once you might succeed
-escape misfortune through a noble deed?

Now you have failed, not only to impress,
but to avoid making a royal mess.
Not only did you let me play the fool,
but opened up this heart to ridicule.

Don’t you recall the words you often heard?
Your mother, teachers, and your friends concurred.
They said you never would amount to much;
things seem to go to pieces with your touch.

You may as well go lick your wounds and weep,
or throw yourself upon a garbage heap.
Preserve this in your memory and then
you won’t risk trying anything again.

The Spirit speaks

O heart, be still and hear my whispering voice.
You’re my delight; a child of mine by choice.
I saw your unformed substance and I knew
how best to mold you. Please believe it’s true.

The error that you’ve made is very small.
It’s hardly worth your mentioning at all.
So calm your anxious thoughts and right your wrongs.
I’ll salve you with my presence and with songs.

I’ve heard the lies hurled at you, precious heart
-lies striking you just like a flaming dart.
You listen, and yourself harshly condemn.
Who do you think is greater, I or them?

I came to heal you, heart, and bind your sores;
abundant life I offer you, and more.
Draw near with confidence; forget the past.
Let truth assure you that my love will last.



“It is by our actions that we know we are living in the truth, so we will be confident when we stand before the Lord, even if our hearts condemn us. For God is greater than our hearts, and he knows everything.”
I John 3: 19-20 (New Living Translation)



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Holly Westefeld02/14/08
This is beautiful, and flawlessly crafted.
Sally Hanan02/14/08
I loved the contrast you present in this, and it's easy to tell that you spent a lot of time with the syllable count.
Rita Garcia02/15/08
POWERFUL! You capture the essense of Christ! Thank you for blessing me in a big way!!
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/15/08
I love the last stanza best for the beauty of the words, as well as for the hope offered.
Patty Wysong02/16/08
The contrast in the voices is excellent and it communicates the struggle within us so well.
william price02/18/08
A multi-layered gem here. A very well executed and written poem. God bless.
Joanne Sher 02/18/08
Lovely and poignant. I was especially moved by the second to last stanza. Wonderful, Sharlyn.
Betty Castleberry02/18/08
Very well thought out and creative. I enjoyed reading this. Kudos.
Lori Othouse 02/18/08
This is really beautiful. I think a lot of people could relate to this & be very much encouraged by it. Thank you for creating this.
LaNaye Perkins02/18/08
This is both beautiful and encouraging. Well done!
Leigh MacKelvey02/18/08
The words in your poetry are always so beautiful. Well done!
Lyn Churchyard02/18/08
I'm not usually a poetry person, but this is superb. I loved the line "I’ll salve you with my presence and with songs." and Zephaniah 3:17 immediately sprang to mind.
Superb Sharyln.

LauraLee Shaw02/19/08
This skillfully crafted poem ministered and refreshed my heart this morning. Anointed.
Jan Ackerson 02/19/08
Absolutely stunning, gorgeous, wonderful. I loved it!
Dee Yoder 02/19/08
Wonderfully crafted and full of emotion and truth. I particularly like the verse you chose to polish this lovely poem with at the end.
Beth LaBuff 02/20/08
I love your contrast between what the hearts says and what the spirit says. The verse quoted at the end ties it all together. What creative and beautiful writing!
Debbie Wistrom02/20/08
Wonderful reading here, great pace and such a message, you delved deep into scripture for this. THANKS!
Sara Harricharan 02/20/08
This is truly a favorite of mine this week. It is beautiful. I love the contrast between the Heart and Spirit and the way it was just like a conversation. Beautiful, wonderful writing! ^_^


   
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