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09/20/07
This exudes peace, serenity, tranquility, stillness... how many other synonyms for calm? Beautiful... prayerful...
09/20/07
A lovely poem with with such meaning and beautiful phrases that tell of the peace, calm we recieve when we trust. Good technique!
09/20/07
Wow, this is so different, so creative ... yes, I think I like it. It's soothing like a bubbling brook. Very nice.
09/20/07
Wonderful, wonderful! The rhythm builds and ebbs, and builds again, just like a stream. I love the gentle, trusting feeling I have when I read this! It makes me smile.
09/22/07
This poem made my day! in the frantic pace of life a breath of fresh air that speaks truth to a tired and aching soul~
09/22/07
This is absolutely lovely - and feels anointed. It calmed my soul. Just beautiful and spiritual in every way.
09/23/07
It didn't even rhyme! Sorry--When God said "poetry" I thought He said "grow a tree" and I was in the backyard. 131 was calm and I liked it. Big help. 8(
09/24/07
This is beautiful and really ministers to me this morning. I'm no "queen" of poetry by any means, but I might have constructed it a little differently. (I'm struggling to offer my critique to such an incredible writer!) Feel free to inbox me for my thoughts. I love it -- I love the way it builds. I love expressing the Psalmist's heart--he's such a poet himself! Your last stanza is, well, WOW! Wonderful! :)
09/24/07
This poem breathes "calm" all the way through. Personally, I find the repetition of the word "but" in the first stanza a bit of an intrusion. I think it might work better to simply start each line with I. That's just my opinion. Everything else is absolutely lovely.
09/24/07
My favorite in the poem, "Like a weaned kitten who purrs with throaty and contented rumbles." The poem is beautiful and right on topic.
09/24/07
"But I have stilled
the thump of my heart with
the syllables of Your holy name…"
Yes! I have done this.
This is very soothing. Nicely done.
09/24/07
This poem is hauntingly beautiful. It is a voice, whispering back answers to a troubled soul.
09/24/07
Beautiful personal reflection on the Words from the Psalm. Loved the rhythm of your original free verse. Altogether soothing. :) Cat
09/26/07
Jan, I think you did a great job on this. I've never seen a poem constructed quite in this way, and I really enjoyed reading over it. Don't fret - be brave! Or, rather, calm. ;-)
09/26/07
Beautiful poem. So you're a poet, also? You got lots of talent, lady. Good job.
09/26/07
What wonderfully effective imagery! Such a creative choice of that particular Bible verse! It's such a delight to see you enjoying writing in the free verse style, and it's definitely a delight to read it. Beatiful!
09/27/07
Congratulations dear friend. I know this was something quite different for you, but it is simply stunning; totally out of the box. Well done. Love, Deb
09/27/07
Congratulations, Jan. You're on quite a roll. :) And this is absolutely beautiful. You are a gifted writer in any style you choose.
09/27/07
So glad to see this; and after reading the story behind the work, I see God's hand in it all. Congratulations and continued blessings on your writings! Loren
Pat Guy  
09/27/07
I finally got to your Free Verse that was sooooo bad it placed first.

It-is-awesome Jan ... and I'm glad I sought it out.

It's beautiful - exquisite.

If mine were only as bad. ;-)
09/28/07
A novice read a master for guidance, and found inspiring beauty. My gratitude for your sharing of your gift is beyond telling.
09/28/07
Still within the bemused state of awe, I meant to offer congratulations on the Editors Choice, as well. All the best in your writing.
09/28/07
This poem awed me and ministered to me and stood out as mastery of thought and expression in words. Congratulations
09/29/07
Hi, Jan. Congratulations on your placement. Also, I appreciate you using my story (Fish ...) on the FW Home Page. Thanks, alb
10/02/07
Congratulations Jan on yet another beautiful, moving piece. You are an amazing writer, able to stir the emotions and communicate God and all His attributes in such a superlative way. I look forward to reading your work each week. Thank you for your vision. Coleene VanTilburg
10/02/07
As I read this over more, I could not help but think of someone close to me who suffers from anxiety and dependence on pain meds...What a great prayer...mantra if you will...to call out to God or to thank Him for physical retoration. I guess it could apply to any physical or emotional malady that keeps us wound up and away from God's calming peace.
Coleene VanTilburg
10/26/07
I've never read a poem from a contemporary writer that put fear in me, like I was reading something that could not possibly be written by any human. I'm so in awe of the whole that I couldn't even try to pick it apart for why I love it so much!
06/27/08
Congrats on being a double BoB winner!
06/27/08
This is absolutely beautiful, Jan. Congratulations...again.
06/28/08
Again, very deserving win for this beautiful poem! Congratulations, Jan!
06/28/08
And another congratulation for your recognition for this awesomely beautiful, inspiring poem.
06/28/08
Jan -- I'm so pleased to see this placing in the Best of the Best. Congrats!
Pat Guy  
06/29/08
Jan, I didn't remember you had written this, and I think it was an experiment wasn't it? ;) Congratulations once again - it's awesome. Love,
Pat
06/29/08
I remember loving this when you first entered it, and I'm glad to read it and be soothed again. Double congrats, Miss Jan. :)
07/03/08
Another beautiful piece from one of my favourite authors....
07/03/08
I like the way you kept the spirit of the 131st Psalm throughout the poem. A most inspirational and uplifting piece.
Janice
08/27/08
Incrediblly creative! A real grabber.
10/02/08
I am glad to have my attention drawn to this beautiful poem.
Warmest congratulations, and a speedy recovery. Anne.
11/21/08
How encouraging: the Lord led me to Psm. 131 as I awoke this morning. About an hour later, I joined FaithWriters and read and re-read your poem. Yes 'be still and know' He is God. Thank you for your work! Mary Hauser
12/02/08
What an incredibly excellent piece of work and how wonderfully the Lord has allowed you to capture for us a glimpse of His Presence!
02/17/09
This is one of my favorite scriptures. Thank you for pulling out the meaning for all to enjoy!
03/30/09
Beautifully said!
Well Done!
God
has Blessed
you and
your writing.
04/23/09
Wonderful and well written. Thank you.
10/03/10
I loved this years ago..and still do..