| Member Comments |
| Member |
Date |
Ann Grover  | 09/20/07 |
| This exudes peace, serenity, tranquility, stillness... how many other synonyms for calm? Beautiful... prayerful... |
| Leigh MacKelvey | 09/20/07 |
| A lovely poem with with such meaning and beautiful phrases that tell of the peace, calm we recieve when we trust. Good technique! |
| Sheri Gordon | 09/20/07 |
| Wow, this is so different, so creative ... yes, I think I like it. It's soothing like a bubbling brook. Very nice. |
| Dee Yoder | 09/21/07 |
| Wonderful, wonderful! The rhythm builds and ebbs, and builds again, just like a stream. I love the gentle, trusting feeling I have when I read this! It makes me smile. |
| Dianne Janak | 09/22/07 |
| This poem made my day! in the frantic pace of life a breath of fresh air that speaks truth to a tired and aching soul~ |
| Joanne Sher | 09/22/07 |
| This is absolutely lovely - and feels anointed. It calmed my soul. Just beautiful and spiritual in every way. |
| Frank Creed | 09/24/07 |
| It didn't even rhyme! Sorry--When God said "poetry" I thought He said "grow a tree" and I was in the backyard. 131 was calm and I liked it. Big help. 8( |
| Jan Ross | 09/24/07 |
| This is beautiful and really ministers to me this morning. I'm no "queen" of poetry by any means, but I might have constructed it a little differently. (I'm struggling to offer my critique to such an incredible writer!) Feel free to inbox me for my thoughts. I love it -- I love the way it builds. I love expressing the Psalmist's heart--he's such a poet himself! Your last stanza is, well, WOW! Wonderful! :) |
| Sharlyn Guthrie | 09/24/07 |
| This poem breathes "calm" all the way through. Personally, I find the repetition of the word "but" in the first stanza a bit of an intrusion. I think it might work better to simply start each line with I. That's just my opinion. Everything else is absolutely lovely. |
| Joy Stewart | 09/24/07 |
| My favorite in the poem, "Like a weaned kitten who purrs with throaty and contented rumbles." The poem is beautiful and right on topic. |
| Betty Castleberry | 09/24/07 |
"But I have stilled
the thump of my heart with
the syllables of Your holy name…"
Yes! I have done this.
This is very soothing. Nicely done.
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| Loren Thomas | 09/24/07 |
| This poem is hauntingly beautiful. It is a voice, whispering back answers to a troubled soul. |
| Catrina Bradley | 09/25/07 |
| Beautiful personal reflection on the Words from the Psalm. Loved the rhythm of your original free verse. Altogether soothing. :) Cat |
| Sherrie Jackson | 09/26/07 |
| Jan, I think you did a great job on this. I've never seen a poem constructed quite in this way, and I really enjoyed reading over it. Don't fret - be brave! Or, rather, calm. ;-) |
| Kristen Hester | 09/26/07 |
| Beautiful poem. So you're a poet, also? You got lots of talent, lady. Good job. |
| Linda Watson Owen | 09/27/07 |
| What wonderfully effective imagery! Such a creative choice of that particular Bible verse! It's such a delight to see you enjoying writing in the free verse style, and it's definitely a delight to read it. Beatiful! |
| Deborah Porter | 09/27/07 |
| Congratulations dear friend. I know this was something quite different for you, but it is simply stunning; totally out of the box. Well done. Love, Deb |
| Sheri Gordon | 09/27/07 |
| Congratulations, Jan. You're on quite a roll. :) And this is absolutely beautiful. You are a gifted writer in any style you choose. |
| Loren Thomas | 09/27/07 |
| So glad to see this; and after reading the story behind the work, I see God's hand in it all. Congratulations and continued blessings on your writings! Loren |
| Pat Guy | 09/27/07 |
I finally got to your Free Verse that was sooooo bad it placed first.
It-is-awesome Jan ... and I'm glad I sought it out.
It's beautiful - exquisite.
If mine were only as bad. ;-) |
| Therese Witkus | 09/28/07 |
| A novice read a master for guidance, and found inspiring beauty. My gratitude for your sharing of your gift is beyond telling. |
| Therese Witkus | 09/28/07 |
| Still within the bemused state of awe, I meant to offer congratulations on the Editors Choice, as well. All the best in your writing. |
| Verna Cole Mitchell | 09/28/07 |
| This poem awed me and ministered to me and stood out as mastery of thought and expression in words. Congratulations |
| April Bailey | 09/30/07 |
| Hi, Jan. Congratulations on your placement. Also, I appreciate you using my story (Fish ...) on the FW Home Page. Thanks, alb |
| Coleene VanTilburg | 10/02/07 |
| Congratulations Jan on yet another beautiful, moving piece. You are an amazing writer, able to stir the emotions and communicate God and all His attributes in such a superlative way. I look forward to reading your work each week. Thank you for your vision. Coleene VanTilburg |
| Coleene VanTilburg | 10/02/07 |
As I read this over more, I could not help but think of someone close to me who suffers from anxiety and dependence on pain meds...What a great prayer...mantra if you will...to call out to God or to thank Him for physical retoration. I guess it could apply to any physical or emotional malady that keeps us wound up and away from God's calming peace.
Coleene VanTilburg |
| Alisa Wagner | 10/26/07 |
| I've never read a poem from a contemporary writer that put fear in me, like I was reading something that could not possibly be written by any human. I'm so in awe of the whole that I couldn't even try to pick it apart for why I love it so much! |
| Seema Bagai | 06/28/08 |
| Congrats on being a double BoB winner! |
| Michele Roach | 06/28/08 |
| This is absolutely beautiful, Jan. Congratulations...again. |
| Dee Yoder | 06/28/08 |
| Again, very deserving win for this beautiful poem! Congratulations, Jan! |
| Verna Cole Mitchell | 06/28/08 |
| And another congratulation for your recognition for this awesomely beautiful, inspiring poem. |
| Beth LaBuff | 06/28/08 |
| Jan -- I'm so pleased to see this placing in the Best of the Best. Congrats! |
| Pat Guy | 06/29/08 |
Jan, I didn't remember you had written this, and I think it was an experiment wasn't it? ;) Congratulations once again - it's awesome. Love,
Pat |
| Catrina Bradley | 06/29/08 |
| I remember loving this when you first entered it, and I'm glad to read it and be soothed again. Double congrats, Miss Jan. :) |
| Suzanne Rowe | 07/03/08 |
| Another beautiful piece from one of my favourite authors.... |
| Jeanette Oestermyer | 07/03/08 |
I like the way you kept the spirit of the 131st Psalm throughout the poem. A most inspirational and uplifting piece.
Janice |
| Marijo Phelps | 08/27/08 |
| Incrediblly creative! A real grabber. |
| Anne Linington | 10/02/08 |
I am glad to have my attention drawn to this beautiful poem.
Warmest congratulations, and a speedy recovery. Anne. |
| | 10/07/08 |
Thank you lovely.
Blessings. |
| Mary Hauser | 11/21/08 |
| How encouraging: the Lord led me to Psm. 131 as I awoke this morning. About an hour later, I joined FaithWriters and read and re-read your poem. Yes 'be still and know' He is God. Thank you for your work! Mary Hauser |
| Cherry Bieber | 12/02/08 |
| What an incredibly excellent piece of work and how wonderfully the Lord has allowed you to capture for us a glimpse of His Presence! |
| Juliana Gonzalez | 02/17/09 |
| This is one of my favorite scriptures. Thank you for pulling out the meaning for all to enjoy! |
| Thomas Kappel | 03/30/09 |
Beautifully said!
Well Done!
God
has Blessed
you and
your writing. |
| joanna reed | 04/23/09 |
| Wonderful and well written. Thank you. |
