The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 861 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
05/24/07
This-is-awesome! (I have a feeling I know)

Wow! And double Wow!!

Wow.
So profound! Good job.
Especially loved the last three words -- a new belonging! Power packed!
05/24/07
Excellent excellent work! Love the movement and the message. The thing I really like is that in every stanza the first letters of the lines spell out "Failure" .... incredible! Take a look … every stanza has:

F
A
I
L
U
R
E

That is very hard to do … wow!
The construction of your poem is extremely creative, and the message tremendous!
05/24/07
Wow! AS I began the third stanza I wanted to stop reading and almost did. I'm glad I finished it. Thanks for offering hope, and the reception of that blessed hope. This is awesome,blessed.
05/24/07
Wow! AS I began the third stanza I wanted to stop reading and almost did. I'm glad I finished it. Thanks for offering hope, and the reception of that blessed hope. This is awesome, blessed.
05/25/07
This is cool. Great job.
Vivid , strong word choices!
So well constructed! I loved it.
05/28/07
Love the structure, and your imagery, as always, is amazing.

Since you asked for critique, I'l suggest that perhaps it's a stanza too long? One is simply overwhelmed by the failure and bleakness--perhaps the effect you were going for? The grace at the end is welcomed with utter relief, and registers deep in the soul.

You're incredibly gifted.
05/29/07
I agree with the others that the structure of your poem is impressive. As a new writer, I'd like to ask; how'd you do that?!
05/29/07
Great poem; love the acrostic style. Especially like that the acrostic at the end is different--pluralized to show the failure of the multiple demons. Very well done. A winner in my book (if that counts for anything!)
This haunting narrative poem has beautiful imagery and a wonderful message.
We are all failures. Thank God for His mercy, making us something special.
Great poem, I really appreciated it. You did a good job using the acrostic technique.
05/29/07
Haunting images. Wonderful piece.
05/30/07
Excellent and nice use of the title throughout. I especially liked the middle stanzas, the rhythm was perfect there.
05/30/07
I am soooo in awe of your gift for writing poetry. You touch my emotions and feelings in a deep and meaningful way.
05/30/07
Purity, Okay... I liked my poem until I read yours. LOL You are a real poet. This is amazing. So glad you are back in the Challenge!
This is great. I like the unique structure and the vivid imagery.
Well made. It's a very vivid picture.
I don't know what I could add to the other comments. The poem is remarkable. It's structure is genius. I've never seen anything like that.

I dabble in poetry but after seeing someone so advanced...I am blown away.

Saying "well done" from a rookie like me just doesn't seem appropriate. But it was very well done!