The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a wonderful job of tying this story to together with "I can do all things through Christ..." This is truly a beautiful entry!
03/06/07
I love your MC's name! :D Seriously, this is a beautiful tale - I loved the wonderful Philippians "bow" you tied this up with from both ends. The characters were very real.
03/06/07
A beautiful and sweet story--very tenderly written.

Be careful, maybe, of the number of sentences that begin with adverbs or gerunds.

Good job on creating believable and sympathetic characters. Very nice.
03/06/07
This is good. You really captured her anxiety about being in a hospital and sharing her faith well.
I like the title. I also like the way you wove everything together, your dread of hospitals, your fear of losing your friend if you invited her to knowing Jesus, and the strength you had to call on the Lord for to accomplish your mission.