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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Craft (as in handcraft) (02/08/07)

TITLE: Double Back Cross
By william price
02/12/07


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The subject was wearing a black jacket and cap, his eyes hidden behind dark sunglasses. He leaned against a storefront with both hands in his pockets. He spied left, then right. After noticing an elderly lady wearing a red scarf ambling towards him from a block away, he turned his jacket collar up and walked in her direction.

“Raven’s on the move.”

Agent Max Gold was perched atop a building across the street.

“Carney, you got’em?”

“Ten-four, sir. The only one walking toward him is an old lady with a paper bag.”

“They just brushed by each other, Carney.” Gold refocused his binoculars.

“Our subject has the bag now, sir.”

“Unit two, stay with Raven. Carney, you follow the woman. I’ll catch up.”

***
Carney and Gold sat in a black sedan parked on an old residential street.

“She lives in that house?” Gold took a drink of bottled water.

“Yes, sir. Far as we can tell, she’s alone. A taxi dropped her off. P.D. says her name is Gertrude Pearlman. Operates a home-based knitting and crochet business.”

“Any connection with Raven?”

“None. Raven’s from London and the woman isn’t on anybody’s radar. We checked with Homeland, FBI, Interpol; nothing.”

“What do you think, Carney?”

“Should go chat with her.”

“We better; our units lost Raven on the MARTA* . We have a bomber loose in Atlanta and we don‘t know why. All airports, bus and train stations are covered. Local authorities have his photos, but that‘s useless.”

“”Yes, sir, Raven’s a chameleon. He’s probably dressed like a female by now.”

***

Carney and Gold walked up to the woman’s house.

“Hello.” Gertrude Pearlman sounded flustered as she opened the front door.

“You okay, miss?” Carney’s eyes scanned the room behind her.

“Oh yes. There’re just people knocking on the front and back doors at the same time.”

“Is it unusual for someone to be at your back door?” Gold quickly entered the residence with his weapon pulled.

“Yes. Oh my, my.”

“Stay put.”

Agent Gold maneuvered to the rear of the home and opened the back door. A young Arabic male tried to flee. Gold tackled him in the backyard and handcuffed him. A search of the man’s person produced a hunting knife. Local police were there within minutes. Gold told them to hold the suspect for their agents.

Carney was sitting with Gertrude on her plastic covered sofa when Gold entered and sat down.

“What do we know, Carney?”

“Unbelievable, boss. Miss Pearlman says the bag had a knitted baby blanket in it.”

“But, it wasn’t for a baby,” Gertrude interrupted. “It was code. I deciphered it. The original message had the name of a strip club named Stars.”

“What a minute, lets back up.” Gold scratched his head.

Carney took a deep breath. “Gertrude said a lady stopped by and asked if she could knit a baby blanket and told her when and where to deliver it.”

“I would never have ventured downtown like that, but she gave me $200.”

“What about the code?” Gold asked.

“In school, us girls were allowed to knit, and we would knit each other notes in code. Well, I got to looking at the instructions for the blanket the lady left, and there was a series of double back cross stitches and color changes in the middle that didn’t make sense. Then, wham, it hit me. Our old code. I thought it was a mistress sending a note to her secret lover. So I fixed‘em.”

“How?” Gold’s eyebrows crinkled.

“I knitted the address to my church with the service time for tomorrow morning. I thought that would mess up their adulterous plans.”

Both Gold and Carney stared at each other incredulously.

***

The next morning, Gertrude’s church was filled with undercover C.I.A. agents as an elderly looking man walked in with a small briefcase. He was quickly apprehended and the brief case was whisked outside and the bomb inside it disarmed.

“So, he was a hit man?” Gertrude trembled as she spoke.

“Yes. We found out through Secret Service, some visiting middle-eastern dignitaries were supposed to be at the strip club this afternoon. You’re a hero, Gertrude.”

“Wow. But, couldn’t you have allowed the man hear the sermon? It was gonna be a good one.”

“He’ll have plenty of time to get right with the Lord,” Gold explained with a smile. “And you, Miss Pearlman, are coming to Washington with us. We need some training on that Double Back Cross stitch.”


Footnote. *Metropolitan Atlanta Rapid Transit Authority. Provides bus and rail service in Atlanta.


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Karen Deikun 02/15/07
How creative! I never imagined entering into a spy adventure with this topic, but this was great. Very humorous. Loved it.
Joanne Malley02/15/07
Ok...whoever this is - clever, so entertaining and clever! You need to write scripts for Hollywood! LOL Great job!
Joanne Sher 02/16/07
So fun and clever. I absolutely adore Gertrude's character, in every way. Such an out-of-the-box idea.
Carol Krejci 02/16/07
I was intrigued immediately by your title, and my interest never lagged from the beginning to the end of your well-written story. Great writing!
Betty Castleberry02/16/07
Very unique. You did a great job developing the characters. Thanks for this entertaining and well-written read.
Mariane Holbrook02/16/07
This was so much fun that I thought I was watching a tv show! It's so clever I can't believe no one else ever thought of it. Many kudos, friend.
Jacquelyn Horne02/19/07
Cute. Would never have thought of it myself. Really different. This should be expanded into a short story for slick magazine.
Pat Guy 02/21/07
What a fun ride and what a spin on the topic! Kudos all around Bill! Woohoo!
Donna Emery02/21/07
Wow! What a cool way to send a code. I really enjoyed the story and you fooled me; I thought the lady was going to be the villain. Well done! Thanks for sharing it
Marilee Alvey02/21/07
William, it's always a pleasure to read your entries. This one was great! It was so easy to follow. You show people, you don't tell them, and it's marvelous. Lots of dialogue and the story wastes no time. Lots of action. A perfectly crafted short story. How do you do it in 750 words or less? Hey, since you obviously don't need them, could you pass some on to your wordy friend, here? Excellent job. Very creative.
Beth Muehlhausen02/21/07
Whoa - cute take on the topic for sure!!! TOTALLY out of the box! Enjoyed the mystery and intrigue, characters, and resolution.

Cooooooool. :-)
terri tiffany02/21/07
Great take on the topic! Creative as usual and the story moved right along nicely:)
Sally Hanan02/21/07
What a fun entry, and all of your little details were so cleverly knitted in... I especially liked Gertrude's plastic covered sofa :)
Myrna Noyes02/21/07
What an unusual and amusing piece! I love detective stories, and this was a real treat! Way to go! :)
Laurie Glass02/21/07
Amazing. How do you come up with such clever ideas?
Julie Arduini02/21/07
I loved this. Boy could the creative talents in media use your gifts. You showed more creativity in one story than I've seen on TV in years!
Sara Harricharan 02/21/07
LOL! I don't mean to echo other commentors, but this was so fun to read and so creative! I am quite a fan of secret agents and mysterious mix-ups and this is a wonderful piece. A perfect ending to my day! ^_^
Joanney Uthe02/22/07
Intriguing. Suspenseful. Loved it. Now let's see, the woman who commissioned the blanket knew the code..... Oh the possiblities.
Edy T Johnson 02/22/07
What a hoot! I love this clever story, SirWilliam. I see other commenters are also seeing you for what you really are: a writer for movies and television (didn't I tell you?)!

Now, how do we get our own "Faithwriters Network" into production?
Suzanne R02/24/07
Fun!!!!! Wow - what an imagination. This is great.


   
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